Nice narrative! I like where you're going. However, we've got some SPAG issues.
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“You’ll have to wait, Enserric. Quiet, were almost there. Im taking a break and then we can continue hunting again.” Lux replied.
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The "were" should be "we're." The "Im" should be "I'm."
If you've established that the sword speaks in tildes, you should put tildes around this.
I'm. Once again, apostrophes are your friend!
All in all, interesting stuff! Keep going, keep going.