Let me clear this off first: I'm a grumpy, jaded person when it comes to reading free verse. Meterless, rhymeless...I mean, I guess you could argue that form mirrors function, but eh.

Alright, onward to your poem.

First and foremost, I notice a snag in the writing. Liberal use of unnecessary connecting words. Sorry, I can't call forth the right term.

What do I mean like this? take, for instance, the first two lines.

I can't help but think "teasing" would be a better word to employ than "it teases." It feels like a better flow. Same goes for eliminating the "and" at the beginning of your second line. Parallel structure is good.

"Muted singer I am" would also probably flow more decently. In any case, around the end, it slows down with grammatical inconsistencies and the like.

Although I do love the rhyming couplet of

And I see you wrapped around your chosen solitude,

Every single time you entice me to intrude.

Though I question the need for putting the "and" there.

The ending imagery was excellent, as well as the bottom line.

All in all, a decent poem.

-Bonk

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