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Critique Corner
If you wrote it, I'll read it.
What is this?

I've decided that as a past time, I'd like to develop my own little Review business, where I'll read and critique anything you write, and the only thing you have to give me is the promise that you won't take anything I say offensive, because after all-- I'm trying to help you, not hurt you and I believe everyone has room for improvement, even myself who makes plenty of mistakes on my own.

How does it work?

It's very simple actually. All you do is post here with the link to whatever you want me to read and whenever I next check this thread I'll go and read it, and write you a nifty little review that I'll post here, and alert you when it's ready. All you have to do is be patient because this is just a past time and I've got my own writing to do after all. I'll also be doing random reviews that weren't requested on whatever I feel like reading.

WILL ONLY TAKE 10 REQUESTS FROM 10 DIFFERENT PEOPLE AT A TIME.

What kinds of literature will you Critique?

-Roleplays
-Poetry
-Song Lyrics
-Short stories
-Character Sheets
-Specific posts (out of roleplays)
-Plots

If there is something you'd like me to review that isn't listed, then just ask. I will not critique art work (sigs, banners, drawings, ect) because I feel that if you are going to give structural advice on something, you should at least know something about it yourself-- and my forte' is writing, not visual art.

Warning

What I write in my reviews is purely my own opinion based on what I've learned in the last 6 years of my active writing life. Some comments I write may not be pleasant and this is my warning to you: if you cannot handle the criticism of others and are only looking to be praised then you've come to the wrong place. While what I write is my opinion, it is also honest to the best of my knowledge and I will not tell you that your work is perfect. It's very easy to understand; if your work is good, I'll tell you so, but if it sucks don't expect me to lie.

Rules and Regulations

1.) Link me all of your work from wherever you posted it originally. Do NOT post the actual writing here. If you don't know how to do this, look in the spoiler.
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2.) Look below to see how many of what I'll review at a time. Do NOT link me to all of your CS's at once and tell me to go at it. If you want me to do them all, you'll have to wait for them one at a time unless they are a series like posts, but if it's Character Sheets, you'll have to wait.

Character Sheets: 1 at a time
Posts: 3 max
Short Stories: 5,000 words max
Novels: 1 chapter only.
Roleplays: 1 roleplay at a time
Poems/Lyrics: 3 max

3.) Don't send me hatemail because I hurt your feelings. I don't wanna read it.

4.) Don't post flames here or I'll report you.

5.) Do NOT post spam here. If you wanna say Thank you, VM me or PM me. Don't post in this thread unless it is related and important, or more than a couple words, because I want to keep this thread clean. Personal messages to me can be delivered via PM.


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(For those who are currently helping me out with any reviews, thank you so much)

-Sophistikit
-Lord Dragonfly of Dawn

GRAPHICS:
(For those who've made banners and graphics for the Corner, thank you! (: )

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Review Library:

Cadaver Art's Character Sheet: Dr. Wilhelm F. Barrows

Zetlian2's Character Sheet: Alex

DarkMatter's Story Excerpt

Kestrel's Poem; Scarlet

Type Oh Negative's Deformed Cat

Ishtar's Character Sheet: Leona

BlckDmnd's Short Story: I killed Harvey Crum

Code Guru's "The Mountain"

Draigh's Character Sheet: Gysgt. Stone United States Marine Corps

Dudel's Character Sheet: Dr. Robert Danial Smith

FMAlchemist Roleplay & Character Sheet

Rilla's Character Sheet: Tsh'Rael

Sir Leadhead's Post in Age of Magic

MedicalHammer's Character Sheets [A]

Xatunix' Don Aurelio Character Sheet

Joyeuse' One on One Post

ZombieInvasion's One on One Posts/ Amare Fratello

girlwithadream's "Beginning of a Story"

Juliet Fay's Character Sheet

Rilla's Touch Your Heart

Dudel's The Inhabitant

Unchosen's Character Sheet: Spaz

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This is officially my longest CS on this web site, and to my dismay the RP never took off. It is horrible because I greatly enjoy that brand of RP, but apparently not many others do, else it would have been so much fun.

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Ahhh so glad you opened this, although as of now I don't have the nerve to have you review any of my stuff xP

Although I may some day.
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heres a post of mine fer you to look over. Im trying to improve my imagry skills, so any pointers you have in that direction would be very helpfull

be harsh. i like harsh. (but if you like it, tell me that too! )
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i know that you have lots of things to do but do mine...?
OH WHAT THE HELL JUST DO IT LOL
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Rilla's CS's

Whennneeveerr you have tiiimmmme
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Oh see, this is a good idea Bunnay.
That.... That.... Hurts.
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This is only an excerpt and is a work in progress but let me know what you think.
My story.
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