So, I've been watching a few battles go on in a Naruto RP I'm in, and I realized that with my fighting skills, I may not stand much of a chance. If anyone's willing to help me improve, that'd be appreciated. I also have no idea about all these 'tiers' and such, so if anyone could define them and gauge my character on the tier scale for me, that'd also be very appreciated. I'm new to the arena, so forgive me if I'm doing anything wrong.
First Character
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Name: Kazou Hakena
Alias: N/A
Age: 86; Physically, his body is 22.
Sex: Male
Kazou stands at almost exactly six feet, and he often stands straight, and weighs about 118 lbs. He has a lightly muscular physique; just enough to be able to lift himself with ease. He has loose, light blond hair, which extends to just to his collar bone, and bangs that part to his right, extending just a bit past his right eye. The color of Kazou's eyes are a lifeless gray, which reflects him very well. Kazou never has a constant attire he wears, but it is notable that he always waers his Akatsuki robe, has a small tanto blade on his back, and two steel gauntlets.
Personality: Kazou is a man who barely speaks. Kazou is very respectful to most people, even to opponents who are vulgar towards him, saying things such as 'Thank you for the battle' at the start or end of a fight. He is very disciplined and analytic, and often never questions what other people say, even if they're demanding or rude about it. Kazou never harbors grudges or acts angry towards another person, in fact, Kazou barely shows any emotion, but he is very reassuring with his words, and at times he is surprisingly persuasive. Since Kazou is so respective to others, he never sets up ambushes against opponents on his own, though he has no quarrels for surprise attacks if Akura or a certain few of the Elite tells him too. Kazou is also surprisingly obedient to most people, and if he is not under orders from someone else, Kazou will do as he is told, as long as it does not compromise any of the Akatsuki's goals. However, aside from loyalty and discipline, Kazou has no personality, and is nothing more then a blank slate. He doesn't care much for the world at it's current state and it's war. Though despite his personality, it should be noted that Kazou is very good at acting, and he takes on a completely different personality when he plays his role as one of the lesser members. Kazou tends to be as diplomatic as possible. It should be also noted that Kazou is somewhat obsessed with human anatomy, and tends to hollow out corpses of his foes, storing organs in one of his labs in the Akatsuki. He usually delivers the dead body to Seijuro.
History:
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While growing up, Kazou worked hard to be a successful ninja, and like most children, he had big dreams of becoming a great international hero. He was very different from how he is now. He studied hard and trained hard during his child hood years, but he could never get the hang of ninja training. People of the Hakena started to doubt Kazou's abilities as a ninja, and wondered if he was better suited for other jobs. They decided to put him through to the Chuunin exams, and decided that if he didn't make it through the exams, he would quit his dream as a ninja. So throughout his time at the Ninja Academy, Kazou tried the best he could, and aced all written work. However, he was stuck growing up around prodigies, just to his luck, and they often beat him and outclassed him when it came to sparring, training, and techniques.
Kazou trained rigorously when he became a Genin, and improved dramatically. He slowly began to pick up tons of techniques, and he showed an extreme capacity to remember tons of Jutsu, and he memorized every single one he learned throughout the academy. He memorized lots of tactics that their squad leader taught his team, and was always able to apply them to missions right away, which often got his team a job well done. Although it showed that all the ninjas born with Kekkei Genkai did better then he ever would, including his two teammates, and it only demoralized him more. Eventually it was time for a Chuunin exam, and he answered every single question on the exam quickly. However, it was during the second stage of the exam that he finally took his step into becoming who he is now.
During the second stage of the exam, Kazou encountered many of the ninjas who outshone him in the academy with minimal effort, and he felt like he could beat them, so he challenged them, but something got into him. He defeated many of those who had done better then him in the academy, and he thought he would feel better about it, but he was extremely disappointed. In fact, Kazou almost blasted through the Chuunin exams easily, and he knew he should be proud that his hard work paid off, but he didn't know why he didn't feel fulfilled. It was as if, all he was expecting had been demolished. Could his village's definition of 'prodigy' really be so weak? He admired them during the academy, but they were nothing to him in the Chuunin exam. Kazou quickly rose through the ranks, and became a Jonin by the time he was seventeen. When war started shortly after, he was sent on a mission to the ruins of Bakigakure, a village that was raided during the early stages of the war, as reports indicated there may be records of jutsu that should be destroyed.
Kazou had went with a squad to Bakigakure, and as he went through the ruins, he found a particular scroll that seemed to be able to incorporate human organs and human 'souls' into your own body. Kazou had decided to destroy the scroll, but as he read on, he knew the opportunity was too good to pass up. One of his squadmates tried to destroy it for him, but Kazou struck him down quickly, and followed the scroll, taking apart his body and retrieving his heart, as well as taking his 'soul' which made his body feel younger and lighter. Kazou escaped before the other squadmates could find him, and lived by himself for a while.
As Kazou learned the powers of the scroll, he was amazed, and found that he had taken his squadmate's ability to use Water and Wind elements. For the beginning of learning how to use this ability, he believed he could be a ruler of all five primary elements. He himself was able to use Earth and Fire, and during the war, he was able to abduct a Lightning using-Chuunin, and was able to gather his element. He had also taken their youth, and lived exponentially longer, but he didn't want to make himself known, so he continued to stay in the wilderness. At the age of twenty four, his mind eventually deteriorated to a state where he cared about nothing, yet he continued to practice his jutsu, though he didn't have much of a reason. Years later, a man named Seijuro approached him one day, and drafted him into an organization called the Akatsuki. Kazou was not reluctant to join at all. He merely agreed without question, and has been in the Organization since it was created. He also developed a hobby of human anatomy over the recent years, and have begun dissecting human bodies and placing their organs, from eyes to intestines, in tubes in many of his labs.
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Village/Alignment: Past Village Allegiance is unknown, alignment is Chaotic Neutral.
Rank: S-Rank Missing-Nin
Organization: Akatsuki.
Clan: The Hakena clan is an average clan with no outstanding abilities. Members reside in all villages, and some don't belong to villages.
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Items/Weapons: Kazou almost always has moderately thick steel gauntlets, merely for hand protection, and his tanto is almost always on his back. Kazou has very little things otherwise, having a pouch of about twenty shurikens, and another pouch with ten kunais, seven of which have fire tags attached to them.
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Strengths: Kazou has a large amount of skill in ninjutsu, it being his one proficiency and clearest way to battle. Some may even say he is one of the best ninjutsu users out there, but it is most likely an overstatement, though Kazou does have impressive area-based ninjutsu attacks. However, aside from being a proficient ninjutsu user, Kazou's only other outstanding skill is quick movements and reflexes. He also has an impressive chakra pool.
Weaknesses: Kazou's weak point lays in his taijutsu; he has good footwork, but Kazou can't do much. He can block, but in offensive taijutsu, it is the bane of his combat efficiency, being only average in defensive taijutsu. He has below average physical strength, and in terms of heavy lifting, he could probably only lift his own weight, and maybe a few pounds more. Kazou doesn't have much experience in using Genjutsu, despite knowing a lot about how it works.
*All Jutsu require handseals unless it says 'does not need hand seals'.
Name of Jutsu: Life Siphon Technique Rank: S Range: N/A Type of Jutsu: Medical Kinjutsu Users: Kazou Hakena Elemental Affinity: None Description: The Life Siphon Technique was found in a scroll that Kazou found in the ruins of Bakigakure. The Life Siphon Technique allows the user to incorporate organs into his body, which allows him the ability to use certain abilities that their target could, as well as increase his life span, depending on the healthiness of the organs. It allows the incorporation of human souls, as well, which retains the memory of certain abilities and how to use them, as well as the youth of the person, which adds to the physicality of the user's body. This includes Bloodline limits, but not Kekkei Tota. Weaknesses: When using the Life Siphon Technique, Kazou has to manually sew the organs into his body, thus he cannot do so in the heat of battle. If challenged within six hours of sewing organs into his body, Kazou would have extreme problems in moving his body, as it has yet to become accustomed to them. The same goes for the absorption of souls; upon absorbing a soul, Kazou has extreme headaches, and his mind throbs to the point where he can barely see or hear; and he suffers this state for two hours after absorbing a soul. There is also the fact that he can only take in two Bloodline limits at a time, but they can be replaced by replacing the organ that was used. Kazou often only has the ability to perfectly copy and absorb one special technique from an individual. Jutsu Notes: As of current, Kazou has only used this jutsu on his former squad mate, and an unknown Chuunin. No Bloodline limits have been taken.
Name of Jutsu: Stone Vault
Rank: B
Range: Forty Meters/Radius (Maximum)
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Users: Kazou Hakena
Elemental Affinity: Earth
Description: This allows the elevation of earth in an certain area, and can raise it quickly. It can also lower surfaces as well. The chakra cost required is dependent on the speed and area of the surface that is being affected. The most common use of this technique is to launch the user high into the air and maneuver them, which gives it the name 'Stone Vault'. The use of this jutsu does not require handseals, but it does require the user to make contact with the ground using their hand.
Name of Jutsu: Earthen Friend
Rank: S
Range: Personal
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Users: Kazou Hakena
Elemental Affinity: Earth
Description: The user summons a golem made of rock, stone, cement, mud, dirt, or whatever earth-related substance is available at the time. The size of the Golem is dependent on the amount of substance there is to have, the type of substance, and the amount of chakra put into it. The golem can also regenerate, but that in turn also takes chakra. As always, the weakness of the golem is lightning.
Name of Jutsu: Burst Fire
Rank: A
Range: N/A
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Users: Kazou Hakena
Elemental Affinity: Fire
Description: The user creates a sphere of crackling flame in their hand, and tosses it at their opponent. The sphere's physics are the same as a baseball, and throws like one; but it can split into eight different spheres at any given time. Upon impact, the sphere explodes like a fire tag. This does not require handseals, only the formation of the sphere in their hand.
Name of Jutsu: Flame Screen
Rank: C
Range: Personal
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Users: Kazou Hakena
Elemental Affinity: Fire
Description: The user creates a slight wall of flame around them which blocks them from the view of other people, and vice versa. The flames continue to spin around where the user is for two seconds, before they spin outwards and slowly dissipate.
Name of Jutsu: Strangled Thunder
Rank: A
Range: Ten Meters/Radius (Maximum)
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Users: Kazou Hakena
Elemental Affinity: Lightning
Description: The user sends out a thick stream of electricity at their opponent, and the stream can be controlled in their movement, but only in straight and forward movements, being unable to curve. When the attack hits, it can do one of two this; it can either wrap around the enemy and coil them and restricts them, or causes an extreme amount of damage to the opponent.
Name of Jutsu: Water Vortex
Rank: S
Range: Forty Meters/Radius (Maximum)
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Users: Kazou Hakena
Elemental Affinity: Water
Description: The user turns a body of water into a swirling whirlpool that spins at an extremely quick rate, too quick for ninjas to keep balanced on. The larger the body of water, the more chakra it takes, but the whirlpool can keep itself spinning depending on how quick the user made it at first.
Name of Jutsu: Crushing Wave
Rank: A
Range: Thirty Meters/Radius (Maximum)
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Users: Kazou Hakena
Elemental Affinity: Water
Description: The user either produces one of two things for this technique; the main use of this technique is to create a large wave that soars twenty feet in the air, to crush the opponent. The other use is within a body of water, where many waves swarm towards the opponent, and compress into them, in an attempt to crush them.
Name of Jutsu: Aerial Glide
Rank: C
Range: Personal
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Users: Kazou Hakena
Elemental Affinity: Wind
Description: The user controls air currents to allow themselves to 'float', in a sense, and move forward in air. The user cannot glide straight; as they 'fly', they will gradually fly down. This technique is slow and hard to control, though it uses very little chakra, it is not applicable for most aspects of combat.
Name of Jutsu: Lightning Catalyst
Rank: A
Range: Personal
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Users: Kazou Hakena
Elemental Affinity: Lightning
Description: The user sends lightning throughout their body to an extreme amount, though it can only be held so long. If physical contact were to be made against the user while this technique is in use, the opponent would suffer great. It also adds a slight bit of defense to the user, while it doesn't completely defend them from attacks, it can nullify a small amount of pain.
Name of Jutsu: Blast Shield
Rank: A
Range: Personal
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Users: Kazou Hakena
Elemental Affinity: Wind
Description: The user creates a vacuum that spins in the air at intense speeds, and has the ability to disperse energy and chakra based projectile attacks up to rank A, except for fire, which can dissipate the shield with rank B abilities.
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Name/Species: Kabokoro, The Land Shark
Age: Unknown; at least over a Century
About thirty feet in length, Kabokoro is somewhat of a humanoid shark. He has large muscular arms that are where his fins are supposed to be, and muscular feet as well.
Personality: Kabokoro has an extremely destructive personality, and loves to hurt and topple over things. He barely obeys anyone and had to be submitted into a summoning contract by Kazou. However, over the years he has grown accustomed to Kazou and works well with him.
History: Legend has it that a large walking shark terrorized the small villages of the ninja world many years ago, and scared all of their civilians. However, in the past forty years, the Shark has yet to make another appearance, and many believe that the Shark is dead.
Special Traits: Kabokoro, due to his size, has an extreme amount of physical strength; enough to pull a tree out of the ground. Also, being a shark, Kabokoro is very quick in water, and thus fighting him in water is extremely menacing. Aside from talking, he has nothing else.
Weapons: N/A
Name of Jutsu: Water Release: Arm Drill
Rank: B
Range: Personal
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Users: Kabokoro
Elemental Affinity: Water
Description: Kabokoro draws water from an existing water source, and encircles it around his 'hand' and 'forearm', having the water spin enough to make his arms become drills. It's spinning intensity is enough to combat swords and other weaponry.
Name of Jutsu: Water Release: Wound Washing Aura
Rank: A
Range: Personal
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Users: Kabokoro
Elemental Affinity: Water
Description: Kabokoro can constantly draw in water into wounds, which can wash out poisons from wounds, stop bleeding momentarily, and dull the pain. It can also entirely heal wounds, but it takes an extremely long time, and often a small cut would take a whole day to recover from.
------------------------------------------------ Character Notes: Kazou has many labs around the Akatsuki where he keeps all organs from bodies around in tubes, just in case they would ever be needed. They are all labelled and classed in blood types and various other medical information. Kazou's largest lab is hidden in a hollow cave thirty feet underground. The entrance is behind a waterfall in the Land of Rivers, and is often walled up and reinforced by one of Kazou's Earth Jutsu.
Second Character
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Name: Hao Senju
Alias: Sometimes referred to as 'The Master of Creation' for his jutsu style.
Age: 65
Sex: Male
Hao is an extremely muscular and physically menacing man. He stands at an extremely tall height; 6'8, almost inhuman, and weighs almost 300 lbs from pure body weight. He has very broad shoulders and a square jaw, and tenses with muscle. He has red hair, braided back in a Jamaican style hairdo, with a few braids hanging at his sides. He has intricate light blue tattoos on his face, looking much like a tribal mask was painted on, and often wears leggings that look like the bottom half of a monk's robe, often a blue color. He wears a sleeveless black shirt often as well, and heavy red gauntlets that cover his wrist and forearm, with a little blade-shaped plate piece sticking out from the elbow. He also wears a necklace with a blue gem on it, and a few bladed teeth-like decorations beside it.
Personality: Hao is a quiet and wise Kage. He talks very little with his subordinates, but he is more of a silent hero. Everyone in his village knows how deeply he cares about his villagers and those who work under him. He is known for his leniency for crimes done by those of his own villages, but crimes against his village by others, his punishments are rather ruthless. He often wants his village to risk themselves as few as possible, so he often stood in the front lines during the war.
History:
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When Hao was born, he was bulky child, and naturally muscular. While growing up, Hao's grandfather was the Tsuchikage, and he was known for his kindness, humor, and how deeply he connected with his villagers. While growing up in the ninja academy, Hao was often picked on for his size, being too big, and Hao's grandfather often asked if he wanted him to interfere, but Hao always took it with no worries. Hao loved his grandfather, and they were very close. As Hao grew up to be a Genin at age ten, he made many more friends as people began to mature more. He had many friends, but mostly were only his friends because his grandfather was the Tsuchikage. Nevertheless, Hao enjoyed the attention. He often just lived his life like any other Genin, doing small missions and such.
However, when Hao turned into a Chuunin at age sixteen, his grandfather had died through murder, and his father had become the Tsuchikage. Hao's father was a tyrant, very power-hungry and unforgiving. He was ruthless in his rule, and enjoyed to see violence. Hao never loved his father, but he never hated him, until he became Tsuchikage. Hao despised his father, and often trained with thoughts of taking him down. Many people despised Hao, associating him as 'The Tyrant's Son'. When Hao became Jonin at age twenty, he rounded up a great number of ninja to rebel against his father, and eventually he defeated his father, taking over the position of Tsuchikage after a long civil war that lasted ten years.
Hao began to train in a set of his own type of techniques, manifesting certain earth as what seemed to have them become individual beings, and often was able to create armies of his own, made of earth or stone dragons, sharks of water, walking trees, mud tigers, and many others. These techniques gave him the nickname 'The Master of Creation', and he often trained on these type of techniques until now. He later got word that he was blamed for the attack on Mizukage, but it appeared to have been an order from his father that was not to take effect until he was sure that Hao was in office. This was what started the ninja war.
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Weapons/Item: Hao travels very bare; he tends not to carry many ninja tools with him. He has two gauntlets that cover his wrist and forearm, crafted from his own Wood Release techniques. He doesn't have much else on him.
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Strengths: Hao is a very proficient Ninjutsu user; knowing a great number of techniques that he's been able to learn over the years. Hao has great physical strength and high chakra reserves. He is also durable and can take a lot of punishment.
Weakness: Despite his looks, Hao isn't as proficient in Taijutsu as he looks. He's good at blowing you away with his force, but the actual technique to hit someone correctly in the right place is what he doesn't have much knowledge on. Hao is also slow; not slow as in he can't dodge shuriken and projectiles, but he is a very stationary fighter, and doesn't have the quickest footwork. He doesn't have a summon, either.
Name of Jutsu: Wood Release: Walking Tree Horror
Rank: A
Range: N/A
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Users: Hao Monochi
Elemental Affinity: Wood
Description: Hao can target a tree in the area, and make it's roots sprout out, causing the tree to be able to move. The tree will constantly follow a certain target deemed by Hao, and will whip it's branches and attack for as long as Hao puts chakra into it.
Name of Jutsu: Wood Release: Flying Bark Horror
Rank: B
Range: N/A
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Users: Hao Monochi
Elemental Affinity: Wood
Description: Hao can target a tree, and the tree's bark suddenly begins to rip, forming two or three large avian-like beings that fly and peck or claw at the opponent.
Name of Jutsu: Predator of Earth
Rank: A
Range: N/A
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Users: Hao Monochi
Elemental Affinity: Earth
Description: Hao can create a large tiger out of rock, stone, or mud, and send it after an enemy. It can regenerate itself as long as the material it's made out of is still around, but it takes chakra out of Hao as it regenerates it. The tiger is often around ten feet in length, and moves like any other tiger.
I also have no idea about all these 'tiers' and such, so if anyone could define them and gauge my character on the tier scale for me, that'd also be very appreciated.
The simplest definition for the tiers are:
Level 1 Normal Person
Level 2 Genius Person
Level 3 Super Human
Level 4 Can Destroy A Building
Level 5 Can Destroy Several Buildings
Level 6 Can Destroy Towns
Level 7 Can Destroy Cities
Level 8 Can Destroy the World
Level 9 Can Destroy the Galaxy
Level 10 Can Destroy Anything
They are just there to gauge the relative strength of your character in a competition. Generally, you don't want people at level 8's fighting level 6's and etc....has to do with fairness. Both character's you put would be considered level 6's.
Easiest advice I can say for improving your writing skill besides asking for help on the forums is to read good books and to write a lot. You tend to emulate your favorite authors/books and your grammar naturally gets better out of habit.
Also, reading takes a bit long, and it's hard for me to get interested into action-based novels, so I don't tend to get better at battles and such. I was hoping for anyone who could 'coach', per say, on how to write out battles and accommodate on things I need to work on when I do RP battle. If you know anyone who can help with that, please point them my way! And thanks again for your help!
Ah, alright. Thanks a lot!
I was hoping for anyone who could 'coach', per say, on how to write out battles and accommodate on things I need to work on when I do RP battle. If you know anyone who can help with that, please point them my way! And thanks again for your help!
You can ask for a mentor here. Skallagrim one of the ones here that does mentoring. Rilla does it too if he has the time.
I'd do it, but I play a lot of video games(Sim 3, Civilization 3, Fallout 1,2,3, Starcraft 2, World of Tanks, Sword of the Stars etc...I got an addiction I know!) and am in three tournaments(Danm, everyone making their tournaments at the same time) which means I get pretty lazy when it comes to responses(Since I got a lot of them).
If you don't mind waiting like days or weeks between posts I could help you out. Otherwise, Rilla or Skally are you best bets or you can always pm someone in the Arena if you like their writing and ask if they could help you out(the better solution if Rilla or Skally are busy).
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