In my opinion Prometheus, I'd say every one of your posts has natural breaking points in it. For example: post 11 You could have ended it right after the guard asked Daryl to put his hands on his head. A classic, exciting cliffhanger, leaving your reader wondering what is going to happen next.
Post 13: You tell three different stories in this post - one about the group of traders, one of Daryl's interaction with Sarah, AND THEN a 1400 word add-on about his interaction with Ratchet. That's easily three posts of appropriate length; you even broke them up with - - - marks!!! Trust yourself next time!
Post 17: You had a nice little dream sequence, and then a natural breaking point when Daryl made the decision to go look for Sarah. A perfect ending after
Boom, end post, next one tells how nice their eggwich date was.First things first, he thought - time for breakfast... Maybe he could ask Sarah to go with him... But as Daryl set out to her shop a couple of blocks away, a thought occurred to him that she might not actually live at her workplace. Still, he reasoned, it was as good a place as any to start looking.
Just my critiques, and how I would suggest you go about breaking your posts up. Feel free to take them or leave them. As it stands, with the natural break points already in your posts, you wouldn't have to 'add' some in, which could affect your writing style; changing your natural flow (which I do enjoy) could cause your posts to sound strained in places.