Need help for delicate RP situation

[Mikael]

That was a very insightful and thoughtful analysis, Foster, thank you. =) I've been jotting down everyone's contributions and yours shall be included as well.

[Mikael]

Billy agrees to tutoring! ^^

Gonna find Thuban now..

[Roose Hurro]

Slow doooooown the writing-process, take each idea (simple is good) at a time and support them individualy with details (in sequential order) so they may stand on their own sentances. Then run the sentances together.

In short, Billy has to dumb everything down for those of us that aren't mind-readers. That, and make a special point to note when s/he is noting details, or changing a topic.

In fact some details can count as subtopics on their own, with their own sentances.

Once he gets some expository-writing papers under his beltline, I'm sure his overall syntax will improve.

Yes, very good evaluation, though I'd have to add I noted a pattern of repetition on top of this whole rapid fire don't slow down I can't seem to order my thoughts in anything other that a very long and messy run on sentence with lots of grammar/spelling/syntax problems that I just can't seem to fix. Or something like that. Heh. I'm pretty good at interpreting things like this, but I can see how others might have difficulties. It's certainly not enjoyable to read. And would be hard to respond to.

Hopefully the tutoring will help. Oh, and thanks for the samples, Mikael.

[Kadaeux]

I have to say his writing is FAR from the worst i've seen on the sites though.

[Nereid]

I have to say his writing is FAR from the worst i've seen on the sites though.

Agreed.

Though tuition will help, it's not even close to the worst I've seen. Just find a smutty highschool rp in the Free section and you'll know what I mean,

[Lillian Thorne]

No it's not the worst, not by a longshot. But I really appreciate how concernd the OP has been with making sure the player is having a good time. Many would just let them fade rather than help.

[Mikael]

Yes, very good evaluation, though I'd have to add I noted a pattern of repetition on top of this whole rapid fire don't slow down I can't seem to order my thoughts in anything other that a very long and messy run on sentence with lots of grammar/spelling/syntax problems that I just can't seem to fix. Or something like that. Heh. I'm pretty good at interpreting things like this, but I can see how others might have difficulties. It's certainly not enjoyable to read. And would be hard to respond to.

Hopefully the tutoring will help. Oh, and thanks for the samples, Mikael.

You're welcome, Roose! Also, I PMed you the links, in case you didn't realize it, because I believe you requested them, too. =)

I have to say his writing is FAR from the worst i've seen on the sites though.

Agreed.

Though tuition will help, it's not even close to the worst I've seen. Just find a smutty highschool rp in the Free section and you'll know what I mean,

I also agree. Billy's writing is not the worst I've seen, but hopefully it'll be improved. I'm going to keep tabs on Billy and Thuban's progress-- moreover, Billy was sort of shocked that I suggested this to him, not that he was mad or anything-- it was just kinda random, he said. I told him I couldn't really figure out a nonchalant way of bringing up the idea, heh. In any case, he was very happy and eager to be tutored-- I'm guessing he never thought it'd be possible on RPG. *shrugs*

No it's not the worst, not by a longshot. But I really appreciate how concernd the OP has been with making sure the player is having a good time. Many would just let them fade rather than help.

Thank you, Lillian-- it's nice to know that this sort of mindset hasn't washed away on this site. I've always believed that in a Roleplay thread, seeing to the entertainment and comprehension of your fellow RPers is a worthy goal-- I don't think it should matter if you're an RPer or GM, if you can help, you should help. =)

Well, I thank everyone for their contributions and thoughts-- I think this thread has reached its conclusion quite nicely. Happy holidays and good cheer!

[Roose Hurro]

You're welcome, Roose! Also, I PMed you the links, in case you didn't realize it, because I believe you requested them, too. =)

I got them, thanks... a very long thread I haven't had the time to read yet, and with the samples (should have thought to ask for those), it gave me enough for my evalutation. Like others have noted, not the worst I've seen ("Billy" just seems disordered, trying to cram in too much, even though his posts are anything but one-liners... those are the real hard ones to deal with). The effort is certainly there, it just needs refinement in structure.

[Mikael]

Would you like a summary of the RP? =o~

[Roose Hurro]

Would you like a summary of the RP? =o~

No, the intro post gave the general idea, so I already know what it's about. Just gonna take some time to read it, and lately, I'm just trying to keep up with the RPs I'm playing in, so it will be slow reading.