Mass Effect: Nova

[Dervish]

Soshi, Karen would, as would any of the other tech experts. Since it's not an AI core, and just another piece of machinery to maintain, it would be accessible. I'd imagine that it would need authorization codes for anything that would effect the ship's systems, however. So yeah, Karin can go party in there if she'd like. My second playthrough with my femshep, I took Dr. Michelle aboard the Normandy instead of Dr. Chakwas and I felt friggin' terrible for it. >_> Damn my need to see all the content.

IT'S KIWI TIME! DUN DUN DUUUUN.

First off, for the most part this CS is fantastically done, and I only have a few small comments to make!

First off, your picture isn't working. I think something went horrifically wrong there. You may want to fix that. Also, a small paragraph describing his appearance for the stuff the picture doesn't show would be awesome.

A side note that's important is since this RP takes place several years before Mass Effect, there are no thermal clips. Everything runs off the ME style cool down and heat management, so the bits about thermal clips don't apply.

The history is pretty awesome, and at first I confused Poshni's 8 years in the marines as a part of Kezna's history, so I was really thinking something was off, but alas, I just fail at reading comprehension. A couple things I'd like clarification on are if you picked Rosenkov Materials because of the role they're playing in the role play or if that was a just a random company you picked? I'd kind of like to know why he was betrayed by Rosenkov, and if he'd have insider knowledge of the company that would be useful for the Broker agents which would come into effect during the game. We could PM each other details and what not about that.

The other was it seems like Kezna was just picked up by the Shadow Broker, so did you intend to have him as a rookie agent? It might me an idea to take a couple years or so off of his Omega days and add them to the Shadow Broker employment, since this mission is basically set aside for the top agents the Shadow Broker has at his disposal. It might be hard to trust a new guy with something so sensitive, y'know?

Other than that, fantastic stuff, I look forward to having you in the game Kiwi! Gold stars, all around. Just clarify or fix the points I mentioned and you're good to go!

Alrighty, it's Hikari time!

Appearance is fine, I have no problem with 3D renders, especially ones that are close enough to photographs. The armour and what not is fine, too. I'm personally not fond of combat ready people showing a lot of skin, like their midriff, but to each their own, right? Same thing I mentioned for Kiwi, if you could do a small paragraph about appearance that the picture doesn't necessarily show, that would be great. Stuff like height, weight, disposition, stuff like that.

If you could space out your paragraphs more, that would be fantastic. It's hard to keep track of where I am when it's all connected. The back story is great, I always was fond of the children being turned into perfect weapon themes, and this is no different! My only point is similar to Kiwi's about the Shadow Broker bit, I'd kind of like if she was employed with the Broker for some time before this RP for experience and trust issues, especially with how important the mission is. As well, I think the Broker would prefer to offer Jinsoku work and what not instead of going to her father to send her, it's one of those things where loyalties can be questioned and I'd like for her to be a bit more than a minion. The only part about your gear I'm iffy on is the arc grenades, since I don't think these were even invented at this point by the quarians, kind of like the arc pistol was made sometime after ME2.

Other than that, all looks great! I'll add both of you guys to the approved section, just fix what I suggested and feel free to post when you're ready. Your characters should arrive on Intrepid Station drugged like Ryloc was since it's location is supposed to be uber top secret and nobody (other than maybe the pilots) know if it's a space station, a planetary base, or a ship. Basically, retrieval agents put your character under, they wake up in a medical room for a check up and are sent on their duties aboard the station. In this case, your characters will be in the same group as the current Broker agent characters. This is their first team exercise.

[Capt Kiwi]

I had a feeling I should have put his father's history in a Spoiler I'd like to say while I'm clarifying that my brain kind of turned to mush part of the way through so I apologize for all of the clarifications needed.

In regards to Rosenkov: I haven't read any of the IC yet so I did not incorporate them on purpose, they just seemed like a reasonable company to work for. Originally, I had meant for the assault on Kezna to just be a group of mercenaries who caught wind of a special delivery with Kezna getting blamed for it, but I like the idea of a betrayal. I feel a betrayal would give the story a bit more depth, especially since Rosenkov seems to be involved in the story. I would like to know more about your thoughts on that and insider knowledge through a PM if you wouldn't mind. We should see if we can't work something great out.

And I was not intending to have Kezna just be a rookie agent, this is another brain-mush incident. Thanks for catching that, I'll fix it. I'll also go back and fix the appearance, image, and thermal clip section in the morning. Please send me that PM, I'd love to perfect Kezna's story a little more and any other comments/ideas you have would be great to hear!

Tomorrow I'll try to do a little IC reading to get a feel for the story and make my first post. Hopefully I'll have it up by tomorrow night!

[Dervish]

I'll PM things when I'm not so brain dead myself. I seem to only have the capacity for IMs at the moment, which sucks, because I really wanted to work on another RP development tonight. Le sigh. But totally, man! I'll get you up to speed with all of that stuff and we'll work stuff out!

[Hikari Sama]

Hmmm, let's see now. Well, first let me say that Lord Ichitosen Imagawa is her master not her father, she killed both her parents when she was fourteen. Anyway, I wasn't sure about the arc grenades but looking back at it now I will probably just get rid of that bit since it is somewhat unconsequential. I think I have covered everything you suggested and if you are wondering why a woman who is 5'4'' weighs 194 lbs remember that her genetic enhancements altered her muscular density so more density=more weight

[Grif of Hearts]

Unf, dat Grif post.

[Dervish]

Dear Grif,

UNNNGGGHHHFFF!

that is all. >_>

Seriously, friggin' awesome post. If I didn't have to run out the door to go get my friend, I'd whip out a reply for the Shadow Broker bit. Ryloc needs to POUR ON THE CHARM, BAAABY!

[Grif of Hearts]

Thanks dawl. Means a lot. It was a lot of fun writing up for Ingrid, actually. I think I'm going to enjoy roleplaying as her.

And I'm sure Ingrid would be perfectly happy listening to all of his arrogant compliments. You remember our conversation about Ingrid and her past relationships, don't you?

[Dervish]

Exactly why it would be hilarious! Especially with that turian awkwardness about a guy who likes bits and pieces of human culture, but is totally clueless about most of it. "Hey, I love the way those worms on your lips dance. They're, uhh... seductive, I guess? And no, I don't know how to kiss you either. Your vagina has teeth right? Just what I heard, watching a certain documentary. Very informative. So does that mean all human male fathers are eunuchs now, or whatever? It's cool... I use the backdoor."

[Grif of Hearts]

“You know, you started off perfectly good, if you like the adorable but incredibly awkward kind of guy but half way through it just turned disturbing beyond measure. If you're really looking for someone to have some fun with I think you'd probably hit it off between with Reginald here. You seem like the kind of bloke who'd want it chopped clean off half way through an orgasm and Regi's got omni-blades for that.”

I am going to enjoy this.

[Captain Jenno]

Sweet bananaramawitz, are we back?