Well my only issue is that there is no way in hell Athene would come if addressed so. She doesn't deal well with threats. So you can leave the threat but then you'd need to take out her arrival. Or vice versa.
I don't mind the threat, if that makes any sense, but she just wouldn't come.
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My bad! I messed up the order in my head. I need to not be doing 50 million things at once. The post is perfect as it and I'll reply in a bit depending on how many ciders I've gotten in me.