firstly, you can bottle that attitude and sarcasm and show some respect when you're talking. I'm the gm, it's my job to make sure all the characters fit in with teh plot and meet a certain standard, don't go getting insulted because your own adjustments didn't show enough effort.
Yes, this is the casual section, but this rp is high-casual, that much could have been obvious by the lengthly mythos i put up in the opening post AND how detailed i made my own character. Those are both things GMs use to set the bar for players so they understand what the general standards of the rolepay are, without having to spell everything out. No, i will not be asking you guys to write novel-quality posts that are all 10 paragraphs long, but i will be demanding that you guys make characters that are well thought-out, do not have incredibly conflicting character traits, and fit well with the setting. If that is not something you think someoene in the 'casual' section should be able to do, you're welcome to leave.
if you're done being an insulted child, however, you can make the edits i requested and we can all be on our merry way.
and as for the issue of ethnicity, it's exactly as hikrai said. The rp takes place in tokyo, and masamune and all his disciples were originally japanese. If you want to have a character that is f a different ethnicity, that means that the family has to have moved to a different country, for whatever reason (like she stated, separating the key to the apocalypse alone is pretty good incentive) and naturally over several generations, taken on the culture of their new homeland. as I stated, I'm not looking for an entire essay on why they chose to leave japan, but a small explanation is still required (at least something that you can deduce, like in blandman's case), and mentioning when exactly they migrated would also be appreciated.
so no, you do not have to play a japanese character, but YES you have to play a character who has some amount of japanese ancestry tying them back to one of the 10 disciples.]
I won't bother looking over your 'edits' yet since i can see at a glance that several things haven't been fixed as i asked. (most notably, you are still cluttering your powers section with extensive weapon description, rather than switching to the format that everyone else is using).
I'll be waiting for you to make some proper corrections on yoru character sheet, but considering the attitude you showed me last time i asked this, i'm not exactly holding my breath. by all means however, prove me worng.
@hikari thank you for your assistance there, anyways, if you could answer my questions regardiing your character's weapon (how long it can stretch, and if it can only stretch when its in its detatched form) i'd be happy to accept her finally
@ kestrel. Ok, that explanation makes things a bit more understandable. still, I can't imagine that working as a permanent solution. A few years at most. Tnobo is 28 now correct, having him kidnapped when he was 15 is a bit much, so let's say he's been missing since he was 20 ok? that or lower his current age similarly, either way is fine as long as he hasn't been missing for more than 10 years
Also, it's kind of obvious now, but, well, since he's now part of the traitors, he's been found by people who would have known him, (or at least of him) before his kidnaping (since there shoudln't exactly be a million guys running around with no memory and being capable of wielding one of the 10 weapons) so he would salso have been reunited with his clan shortly before this. you're wlecome to keep him as an amnesiac that doesn't remember anything prior to his kidnapping, but someoen really would have revealed his real name to him, along with teh name of his weapon. You can have him still use the names he has grown accustomed to, but you should edit his CS so that it show he's at least aware of what his and his weapon's real names are.
as for the powers, i know what you were trying to do with it, but as i said, it really does defeat the purpose of being in a super-powers rp for the rest of the cast (even if that's exactly the kind of thing your looking for yourself) so out of consideration for the other players, I'm still going to ask you to make the edits i requested earlier. Understand that it's not a case of me thinking your powers aren't suitable enough. Quite the contrary, if this was, for example, a manga i was writing, i would almost definitely include a character who cancels out powers indiscriminately, since they're so fun to work with while writing, but this isn't a story either you or I are writing alone, it's an rp involving several people, so i have to make my decisions on what i let slide and what i reject based primarily on that (it's the same reason i did not let Generic have his void walker ability)
also, i realize that i was over-simplifying a tad bit with the issue of the multiple weapons, but I'm glad to see you still understood the core of my message. I personally think that those 3 weapons types alone should serve well to make your character more versatile while not crippling him outright.
i'm also glad to see that you, like hikari, grasped the concept that eluded marshal so majestically.
@Nosuchthing right off the bat, kudos on making an old character. always nice to see a player who's unafraid to make someone who isn't 'omg super beautiful and young wow' (yes, i say this realizing that my characters are always young and pretty, lol. doesn't stop me from appreciating what others do though right?)
Also really like the power you gave your trident. just a question though, more out of curiosity than anything,did you come up with teh name of that diciple by yourself? or did you find it somewhere else? cuz i can't find a disciple by that name through my internet searches. Honestly, even if you did just make it up by yourself i won't mind, this rp takes ennough artistic liberties as it is hat it shouldn't make any difference lol. I'm just curious is all.
honestly i have practically nothing bad to say about the character at all. If anything i think you might stand to give her one more power just to even things out strength-wise. It doesn't have to be battle-oriented since i can sense that that isn't teh direction you want to take with thsi character, but still, maybe something detection-related (to counter-act th ninja character, and it kind of fits with teh wisdom and knowlege theme of teh weapon) or some sort of healing ability to give her more diversity on the playing field?
also, I really honestly do love the char, but i can't have anyone who doesn't have disciple blood in them wield one of the weapons so, maybe i dunno, make her a member of a branch family, that married into teh main family? That way you can keep her deceased husband as the actual original heir, but this way you could still have her be the current wielder (as well as the one who took care of the blade before her son died).
other than those two minor things though, really impressed with this character, good job.
@generic thank you very much for those edits. And, i agree, that is basically common knowledge, but I'm sure you can understand that, as a GM, it's my job to ask those questions anyway just to make sure, lest i wrongly assume that a player has the same common sense that i do and it cause problems later down the line. I meant no offense to your intelligence, just being thorough lol.
and you aren't sounding rude at all *smiles* i rather enjoy how respectful you are being, but no need to be so meek around me, generally speaking I'm a very patient man and I'll be more than happy to work with you and give you whatever suggestions you may need when reviewing your character.
anyways, I eagerly anticipate kitsuya's history so that I can finally add him to the character roster ^^
@bland thank you kindly, i will look it over shortly
Liking the character overall, was really surprised to see that he was a loyalist (in a good way ^^. I generally enjoy seeing things that i don't expect in characters.
now as for his blade being blood-thirsty. I can't really accept that, because any blade that urges its user to kill and/or maim would be considered demonic, which can't really be the case with the weapons passed down by the disciples. HOWEVER, what I am willing to give you is a scenario where, let's say that Hei Di's ancestor was the last one to stand by masamune's side while they were fighting muramasa, meaning his blade was exposed to Muramasa's evil the longest out of all the disciple's weapons. So, what this would have done is corrupt the blade only partially, so instead of being blood-thirsty like demonic weapons, it would only be battle-hungry. It would make its user more violent and urge it to constantly get into fights, but it would never actually demand blood or someoen's life, it craves conflict, not murder. if you're willing to make that edit, then i have no problem with the sword leaning slightly towards the dark sice.
now, for the sword itself. I would really prefer it, personally, if everyone had their own unique weapon type in this. It's ok if the weapons are similar (liek my katan aand hikari's chokuto, or kestrel's naginata and nosuchthing's trident) but i'd rather them not be the same. Now, i did notice that you made the scabbard pat of the weapon, so it's not just the blade, points for creativity. So with that in mind, if you absolutely can't think of any other weapon/sheath combo or dual-weapon combo that would fit your character's style at all, I will understand and let you keep the katana, however, if you WOULD be willing to switch it to another type of weapon, it would be greatly appreciated.
finally, for his powers. I like them, but so far pretty much everyone has teh same thing, one passive power and one active power. what you have there are two very potentially deadly active powers (by this i mean that they are 'special moves' that your character uses), I'd like you to please change one of them to a less-potent passive ability (so something like a 'background' power that he could keep activated for an extended period of time, but wouldn't really serve to directly harm his opponents or at least if t did harm his opponents, it would be on a very gradual scale (like, maybe for example creating a cloud of poisonous smoke that would gradually drain the stamina/strength of people around him, but would only prove lethal if they stayed in it for like... 20 full minutes)
like i said though, overall a very nice char