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    WOTM #19 Voting (Casual)



    Theme: Creation

    Explained: A story about the creation of something, be it metaphorical or literal.


    Components:
    • The story deals with creation in an artistic, metaphorical sense.
    • The story deals with the literal, technical creation of something non-living.
    • The story deals with the creation of a universe.
    • The story deals with the creation of mankind/society.
    • The story is from the perspective of a creator, be it metaphorical or literal.



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    • Please post explaining your vote and why.
    • Please provide helpful feedback on the entries.
    • Do NOT post anything insulting or offensive about the entries.
    • Do NOT vote for your own entry.
    • Do NOT tell others which entry is your own.


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    Please use this thread to comment on and discuss entries according to the rules listed above. Participants in the contest are allowed (and encouraged) to vote and comment as freely as a non-participant, provided that they do not vote for themselves, and they do not give away which entry is theirs. When reviewing entries, a faux review of one's own entry to preserve anonymity is acceptable.

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    Female Geek Kagamine's Avatar
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    As a note- I will not have time to write up any formal reviews this month. Last month however I was disappointed that I wasn't able to voice even my initial reactions to the entries, so I'll be trying something a little different this time to get my views out there. You'll see.


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    Overall
    These stories all connected to the theme in interesting ways, but a large number show signs that the writer is not experienced in writing in the mode they chose. The way in which the story is presented has a large impact, and without the fundamental pieces stories begin to lose their potential. While writing, it is helpful to be mindful of how you are writing, and why you are choosing to write that way. Exploring the different ways in which you can write opens you up to more engaging styles. I'm not too good at this myself , but I know it definitely works. My choice came down between 1 & 2 since they seemed to have the strongest understanding the style they used. Entry 2 definitely took risks and made a well constructed poem; however, Entry 1 displayed some great talent with word choice and figurative language.
    Last edited by ★LunaLight★; 11-06-2012 at 06:42 PM.

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    Quote Originally Posted by ★LunaLight★ View Post
    (Entry 5)
    The story is neat, I'm not quite sure which direction you were going with it through. It feels like your idea is fragmented with little there to connect the pieces. A lot of things happen, but they just don't all contribute to the story. The shooter at the end was just completely random. I thought that because she woke up to a hospital, the previous parts were all referring to events happening in the hospital, but I just can't make that connection. I guess what I am trying to say, is everything seems to be lacking a center.
    I agree about the shooter at the end being random. It sort of wrecked the entry for me. Up until the ending I was really feeling that one, it was a good idea and from what I could see it was pretty well executed, and at the end I thought you'd done a nice job of tying everything together... and then the shooter came and killed everyone. Um. What. Who even was that? Why did he kill those people? How did he get that far without being stopped, and again, what for? It seems to me like the author needed an excuse for the protagonist to return to her little self-made afterlife, but, their choice of how she died again seems like a lazy option to me. It doesn't make sense and there are other alternatives that could've been taken to create a similar ending. Or end it right before when the random shooter appeared. That would've been a much better ending, I think.

    In other news, I was wearing a very interesting facial expression the first time I read #6. I feel this was worth mentioning. So, good job coming up with something unexpected.


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    I have to say entry 2 and 6 took the cake from me. Since I'm in the middle of something though, I'll just state what I think obvious.

    Entry 1: I like it, though I have to agree with Luna, what you used was not something I'd connect with a writer.

    Entry 2: Yeah, it's great, it has a flow and no mistakes.

    Entry 3: 'kay, interesting theme. But you need to imply paragraphs. Really, a story should not be a literal wall of text like that.

    Entry 4: I'm confused about this one.

    Entry 5: I found the last paragraph out of place. Unless you plan on making a continuation for this, pulling a cliff-hanger randomly like that's not a good move.

    Entry 6: Nicely done with the dark theme. I can't find anything to complain or tell.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Alphakoka View Post
    Entry 1: I like it, though I have to agree with Luna, what you used was not something I'd connect with a writer.
    I don't remember saying that. I thought that making the comparison be anticipated to be God ending up being a writer was a brilliant idea. It is kinda like saying writers are almost playing the role of god when they create new worlds. I voted for number one for this reason.

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    WTF.
    WHERE IS EVERYONE???
    COME ON PEOPLE!

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    I'll read them tonight and vote


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    Alright, here's my thoughts.
    Entry One: I voted for this one because I found it very well written and I thought it fit the best with the theme.

    Entry Two: I have never been much of a poetry reader, but I'll do my best to critique it. I found myself very confused on the last stanza, which had little to do with the theme of the contest. There was one instance where I felt like a word was used that was kind of out of place. But other then those complaints, it was well written. Just needs a little improvement.

    Entry Three: I had a few problems with this one. First of all: formatting. Not many people like reading a wall of text. Then there is how the writer expressed actions. I haven't read a story yet where they use asteriks to show actions. There were a couple of punctuation errors here and there as well, along with some fragments. However, the point of view it is told from is quite interesting.

    Entry Four: It was a close call between this one and the first entry, honestly. It was well written, formatted beautifully, and I could really get into the story. The use of descriptive/figurative language really brought out my feelings.

    Entry Five: Formatting was great, but I did have a couple of minor problems with this one. A couple of small punctuation errors here, a couple of instances of incorrect sentence structure there. However, it did a very good job of getting the point through.

    Entry Six: I liked the unique point of view, as well as the little twist near the end. Alas, if only it was a multiple choice poll. But that would defeat the purpose of the contest, now wouldn't it?



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    After reading them all I voted for the first story. It went well with the theme


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