Long post is long. After reading them all, this is what I thought. Not much for the poem since it's hard for me to critique poetry.
Entry #1: The creation of the world is an interesting concept, and I loved how you pulled it off. I feel like you should use a tad bit more detail, because the whole thing sounds like, “I made this then I made that.” Your descriptive words are brilliant though, so I can let that slide. I am kind of bothered about it sounding too similar to the Bible. It’s nothing about the religion, but I feel it lacks creativity. The only difference I see is the village part. Perhaps the creation of another world would have been more interesting? Maybe I just don’t like component? I refuse to let my dislike of a certain component effect my vote though. I assure you, I’m making this choice completely on your ability to write. I also believe that your beginning made me think you were going with another component.
Entry #2: Poetry is hard to write, and I give you props on writing excellent poetry. Your creativity was astounding, and I absolutely love your word choice. It’s unique, and you certainly have a gift for poetry. I admit, I’m a sucker for good poetry.
Entry #3: Interesting concept and interesting way to write it. I congratulate you for being able to pull it off. I do have one thing to tell you. Paragraphs are your friend. One large block of text is unappealing and turns people away. I also feel like it had something missing. You made it seem like it would head in a whole different direction. What was created? The world the girl lives in? The girl? I’m also not much one for monologs, it makes me feel like I’m reading a piece filled with, “This is me. This is my life. This is my dream.” I feel like it’s kind of boring. The idea behind it certainly made up for that though.
Entry #4: Your story would have been phenomenal had you not added the parts saying, “This is how I was created.” I absolutely love the idea and the originality. You didn’t just take the prompt for what it meant in a literal sense, but you took it in a metaphorical sense. It adds so much to the story. However, I’ve got to critique you somewhere. I can’t only look at what you write. I must look at how you write it. There were a few issues that I had with your grammar. Some points seemed more wordy than necessary. I also feel like the whole thing was, “I did this. I feel this.” Details please? Maybe something else was going on? Elaborate more on the fights or how the people treat you? That’s just my two cents though. Take it for what you wish.
Entry #5: Random guy enters to shoot her. Seems legit. I’ll tell you what I think of the ending first. I believe it is a desperate attempt the author uses to get the ending they desire. On the other hand the idea was brilliant, and I can’t fault you for that. How am I to know that you didn’t want that all along? The creation of a world is interesting, but I feel like there is something missing. I can’t tell you what, but maybe you’re discover it when you practice more. It is an interesting twist on the component, and I love it. It isn’t what I expected at all. I had expected her to wake up in a different circumstance though. As for how you write it, it’s descriptive and your word choice is pretty good.
Entry #6: Something literal. When reading the theme, I thought all of them would be like this. It’s so simple that it’s hard to mess up, and you did splendid. The twist in the end was brilliant, and I believe that’s what makes the whole thing perfect. Sometimes, simple really is best. The way you worded things were a bit awkward, but the idea behind it caught and kept my attention. It was hard to look away from something when I want to know how it will end. I am not the least bit disappointed in that.
I know they're long, but I said what I felt needed to be said. I hope nothing I said came acoss as rude, because I really loved them all. It was all brilliant. I focused on the idea behind it and how it was written.