So what am I going to do with Hisao if I don't get him a squad?
Oh no... A Nara!
So what am I going to do with Hisao if I don't get him a squad?
"The only thing you can change about the past is how you feel about it in the present." - Lockon 'Neil Dylandy' Stratos, Gundam SEED
Hidarii: You know well how I feel about the Nara, but trust me when I say that I'm being VERY leniant with this review.
- Shichi Jisshireikage (The Seven Embodiments of Shadow): Are effectively denied. One is a hard to hurt tank that can rid a person of all their chakra using abilities with a mere cut. The second is invulnerable to jutsu and the only weakness happens to be the inside of it's mouth. The third can copy the abilities of others and turn invisible. The fourth can use all 5 elements. The Fifth can steal jutsu and happens to have super speed. The Sixth is basically uber support with a game only ability and nara powers. The Seventh? Lets not even go there...
These guys are overpowered on their own, but when you factor that they have a Kage level Nara controlling them? That's just insane.
- The summoned deer may not use jutsu. Are we clear? I don't like the idea of deer using shadow powers.
- Hiding With Camouflage Technique The user may not use other jutsu when using this. Even the act of transferring arrows through shadow is unavailable. Any clones will disappear as well. And your arrows cannot be invisible while in flight. Are we clear on this?
- Your bow can fire arrows at roughly 400 fps, while even the fastest bows can only fire an arrow at 320 fps. Your arrows move 80 feet further in a second than the highest quality. And lets be honest that an arrow is incredibly hard to see when fired from a bow. In short, you can easily kill a person in a single shot, and mixing this with the fact that you can literally allow your arrows to pass through shadows and attack from a different angle... I'm going to be honest when I say that your abilities are easily broken. In fact, most Nara abilities are broken.
- I need a limit on how many flash tags and explosive tags you have. It's not just you, it's everybody who has to do this.
My seven Embodiments Were never expected to be accepted, Though I would like to point out that each "carrier" can only have one. Not that i'm going to argue their Acceptability. They were more a fun to write things a while back. Deer were never intended to use jutsu, just be WHEE I'm on a DEER, or DEER STAMPEEEEEEEEEDE. Also thats a given for hiding with camoflauge. I'll nerf my bow to 250 FPS And add limit to his supplies if that would appease you.
And I know Nara's are easily broken. But generally speaking, they handle Multi "same or slightly below skill level" enemy situations poorly, atleast, In my opinion.
Also, yes Ira is a beast, you are right to fear him.
hypothetical question for you, if my shadow beasts were puppets, and hence, controlled by a puppeteer, what would you think? I never got a real review on them last tim e I posted them, So I'm just curious as to how I could balance them for a future, much higher power scaled RP.
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also i'll post the edits up tommorow, I'm going to go to bed in a few minute, so yeah. Was working on a diff cahracter atm, and trying to finish creating the idea i had.
So I expect you would need to add limiters to how much chakra they can absorb, a limit to what they can copy, and probably a limit on the time perception one.
My CS Can change rank/village if needs be - HELLO HIDARII!
Name: Miyagi Naoki (family name, first name)
Personality: As a member of a small clan of the rock village, Naoki tends to keep to himself, he is open and friendly going with members of his own clan and his sensei, but with team mates and those he is not familiar with he is more sullen and closed off, in the woods and other areas where there is an large populace of beetles, he will often stop and just sort of space out, as he can interact with them to a degree, this often annoys others if his team is on a time based mission.
During a mission Noaki is a much focused individual as he prefers to work alone, but will (out of politeness) work with his team, his unique jutsu’s and summoning abilities are often an asset as he is able to attune some of his traits to that of the beetle – such as strength/senses.
Appearance: his eyes have taken on the same sort of shape and patten as a beetles from his time training with the summonable beetles
Weapons/Items: Kunai, exploding tags, Ninja wire smoke bombs (normal ninja kit) and 2 x (http://www.killenenterprises.com/kni.../wolverine.jpg) But instead of skulls, there are small beetle decorations Also uses a SasumataSpoiler
Chakra Element: Earth
History: After becoming a Jounin at the age of 15 he left his village for a while to try and find his ‘place’ in the world, after a year he found an elderly man with a large scroll on his back, they seemed to get on quite well which is odd for Noaki but this man told him about the summoning beetles and so under this old man’s tutoring learned how to summon the beetles of Shinsei kabutomushi dōkutsu (Hallowed beetle caverns) and their sacred jutsu’s -during training, Dai kabutomushi-ō (the great beetle king) that Naoki is the one in the scroll of prophecy’s which name one a ‘Beetle sage’ and would go on to do great things and so before he left he was bestowed the title of the Beetle Sage, the blood contract scroll and a special headband with the symbol that represents the Hallowed Beetle caves. Now back in his village he continues to train and try and prepare himself for the trials ahead as mentioned in the scrolls of the beetles.
Just before his training with the beetles of the Hallowed Caves he had to drink a seryum which would alter his body allowing him to learn the Beetle's Jutsu and help him gain sage mode (as of yet he is part of the way to gaining an imperfect sage mode) but one of the side affects (which was designed as a fail safe to see if he was capable of carrying out the training) was the change to his eyes and eye sight, his new eyes are able to see small things others (with out abilities like the Byakugan or Sharingan) are unable to, like needles flying towards him and is able to see things which would be slightly faster then what the human eye can detect (but his eye sight pales compared to even the one tomao'ed sharingan.)
Strengths: Is good at Tai and Kenjutsu and is resilient to water and earth release jutsu
Weaknesses: is extremely vulnerable wind release jutsu (wind crumbles earth) and lightning style and does not have much defense against genjutsu
Name: Beetle summoning Jutsu
Description: Allows the user to summon Beetles of various sizes to aid in combat or missions, different beetles have different skills and power, the range in size from normal sized beetles (will be summoned if the user does not have enough Chakra) right up to the Great beetle king.
Name: Beetle’s strength Jutsu
Description: Enhances Naoki’s physical strength so that it would be equal to a beetle of human size which is quite a boost to his strength – but this jutsu can only be active for a maximum of 2 minutes.
Name: Beetle Sense Jutsu
Description: improves the users sight a great deal (allowing 350 degree vision) and also allows the user to feel vibrations in the air and discern where the origins of the vibrations are coming from as well as if there are enemies or friends or any ugly surprises in a 3.5 mile radius of Naoki.
Name: Wing shield Jutsu
Description: summons a giant beetle wing case (enough to shield 4 people) which encases the user and up to 3 others in a very hard shield which protects them from damage.
The drawbacks to this jutsu are: It is a channelled jutsu – so if Naoki is distracted enough or moves the Jutsu cancels and each hit the shield takes adds strain and drains the users chakra and so this jutsu can quickly exhaust the user to the point of being knocked out.
Name: Beetles Horn Hammer Summoning Jutsu
Description: Summons a Huge hammer (about 3 times the size of Naoki) this hammer is good for one attack every 24 hours, it takes a lot of chakra to use, but its because of the chakra that Naoki does not need to use the Beetles Strength Jutsu to use.
The attack itself is quite missleading, the actual swing of the hammer is not the main part of the attack as it is a slow swing and is easy to dodge, getting hit by it will end up smashing up your head and brains in to mush, the actual part of the attack to worry about is the shockwaves of the attack, so damaging, they can reduce a medium sized city in to a parking lot in about 15 seconds - it takes so long because the shockwaves travel slower then normal shockwaves but any rubble it creates (rock/building/what ever) is picked up and adds the extra edge to the attack.
Spoilerthe hammers appearence is somewhat like:
Name: Beetle Mode
Description:This is a small technique that messes up the sharingan so it is unable to copy Naoki's Taijutsu moves, though it does not stop any doujutsu from making them out (reading his moves). when beetle mode is active, his eyes increase in size by about 20%, his eye sight increases by about 5% and in the middle of each eye a Kanji letter is just about visible in a white pigmintation, the right eye shows the Kanji letter 甲
the left eye shows the kanji letter 虫. The chakra cost of this ability is small - but it will be noticible in long steached out fights.
Also recently Naoki has recently finished training in the Bītoru-ken style exlusive to those who are deemed worthy by the beetles.
(Bītoru-ken - Beetle Fist; a new style of Taijutsu I invented for this RP just to help him along a bit)
Name: Earth Spikes
Type: Ninjutsu (Cloaked)
Description: Earth Spikes is a Jutsu Naoki can only perform while shrouded in the Tailed Beast Cloak (note: not full beast transformation), this Jutsu allows him to use earth release to create and control a fair amount of tendrils (about 15-20 at max) which spout up from the earth and any other surfaces (well it looks like the sprout from the earth, but they can attach them selves on to other surfaces [part from water]). Naoki is able to use these tendrils to attack and defend, but it takes such a large amount of chakra that Naoki is only able to use it while his cloak is active, and after 3 posts worth of use, the cloak loses a tail since its such a huge chakra drain, and it will take a while before he can regain the lost chakra (so if he was in the 3rd tail cloak Naoki could use this attack for 9 posts before the cloak would dissapear entirely and would be unable to re summon the cloak for a period of time.)
This is a channeled jutsu and so the main draw back is that he has to remain stationary, but he is able to control the Tendrils well: these tendrils are vunrable to wind and fire based jutsu of ranks B and up.
Benifits of being the Nanabi's Jinjurichi
Bijuu Form: Just like it is in the Manga/anime ( http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/F%C5%AB...e=Fu_final.png ) He can also use a 'V2 form' http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/__...x-Bug_bite.png (instead of the normal Bijuu cloak) and a partial transformation where he can manifest two of Chomei's tails to use as wings)
Name of Beast: Chomei
Level of Control: Nearly Mastered
Jutsu:Tailed-Beast Bomb: in the 2 tails cloak and up, Naoki gains the tailed beast bomb, he uses the chakra to un earth the necessary regent and fires it much like the other tailed beast bombs - the size is dependant on how many tails Naoki's cloak has (so fewer tails it is smaller, and while in 7 tails cloak or full transformation it is HUGE (almost the size of a house/mansion)
The beetles sense jutsu becomes passive (like how itachi has his sharingan)
The beetle wingcase shield can be controlled to a greater extent (being able to increase or decrease its size so that it could become like a suit of armour for Naoki) and takes less concentration (from concentrating to keep it existing, just to concentrating to keeping the Bijuu's chakra in to keeping the shield)
The Beetle horn hammer would get 2 swings instead of 1 each cooldown.
Flight. Heightened senses.
My two abilities will be: Since the bijuu is a giant beetle, Naoki's Beetle abilities gain large bonus' from the chakra of the beetle - basically, more bang for your buck, the beetles strengh jutsu gets extended based on how many tails naoki shows (so 1 extra min per tail) and when he is in the second tail Naoki's physic changes, he becomes totally buffed like a worlds strongest man like thing.
the Nanabi is a warrior (Rhino beetles are known to fighting other males, and they are the subject of bets in aisia, tho not all bets :P) and so laughs at Naoki's peaceful ways and will often try and infuse Naoki with a charge of warrior battle lust chakra in to Naoki, but at some point Naoki proves his worth as a warrior and so the Nanabi is begrudingly moved and over time becomes a partner to Naoki instead of a pain, maybe even friends - but not to the degree KB and the ox are - just enough to not want him hurt when in 4th tail +
Good to see you Zagan.
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