After Death: The Spirit Detectives Saga | OOC

[guinness]

Fair enough. I'll see what I can brainstorm up today.

[Alta]

Username: Alta

Post Sample: http://roleplayerguild.com/showthrea...11#post7806611

Post Frequency: Variable, but I will fit the requirement of posting weekly.

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Character Name:

Kana Mikami

Sexuality:

Bi-Sexual

Age:

21

Appearance:

Kana Mikami

Major:

B.A. in Microbiology.

Personality:

Witty
Direct
Moody
Obsessive
Perfectionist
Wiseacre

Hobbies:

Boxing.
Programming (video game-hacks & mods, interactive bots, proxies.)
Reading (thriller, science fiction, historic.)
Sketching (caricatures, landscapes)

Weaknesses:

Somewhat uncouth.
Unable to drive.
Insomniac.
Claustrophobic.

Potential Style of Fighting: Jamming. Capable of transmitting spiritual energy into every day items and, to a limited extent, control them. She can cause the teapot to vibrate uncontrollably until it falls off the table, she can manipulate basket balls to bounce a few inches off the ground or flicker the lights on and off at will. Combat-related examples include the ability of jamming and disabling guns with her mind, firing aforementioned guns without touching them or making cars start up and drive. The downside to this is that she relies on the presence of usable objects, and aside applying minor force to the object (such as making the ball bounce out of itself,) anything that is jammed cannot perform anything it isn't meant to; ie an empty gun can't fire bullets and a firetruck cannot transform into a giant robot. The more force or energy an action requires, the more draining it is to jam.

[Altered Tundra]

@AT: Yes, it's possible if you redo your character (maybe someone who is good at close range? Maybe someone without a penis? - just suggestions) then you could be in chapter one.

I did edit my CS. I completely revamped him to fit the suggestions you....well suggested. xD

[Genkai]

@AT: Maybe add a positive trait for his persona? And does he do practical jokes himself or does he fall prey to them? Otherwise I can accept you once you fix those things.

@Alta: I am a bit concerned because your writing sample seems very small and choppy. Your character would likely be approved but is there another sample of writing you can provide or make up?

[Alta]

Could you be more specific? I think you ask for more description and a slower pace, when I compare our sample posts. Is that right? Or do you simply ask for more sentences per paragraph? I do not have such a sample of roleplaying, but can certainly accommodate if you could explain what exactly you are looking for.

[Genkai]

The sample post you provided just has a lot of dialogue and less detail. (sensory etc) I just want a contribution when someone posts that is enough to note the setting, their feelings, etc. And I just felt it was lacking overall. FiroIV's and (I guess I hate to include myself here) my post sample showed enough detail but can still provide dialogue which can be hard in advanced settings. I just don't want to bring in people who can't write what I've specified as the requirements in the expectations section. The sample you provided didn't get that close to them which is just why I ask if you have something else, perhaps more recent? I hope I'm not being too mean or stubborn here because your female would likely be accepted but the hesitation is the writing sample provided, pretty much.

[Altered Tundra]

@AT: Maybe add a positive trait for his persona? And does he do practical jokes himself or does he fall prey to them? Otherwise I can accept you once you fix those things.

@Alta: I am a bit concerned because your writing sample seems very small and choppy. Your character would likely be approved but is there another sample of writing you can provide or make up?

Added stubbornness, but the aspect of that would lead to determination, hope that works. Also, fixed up the practical jokes part. He fall pray to them. I think that would fit perfectly with his conceitedness and how vanity is his main weakness. Could be that people do practical jokes as a way of getting back at him for being such things. ^^

[Genkai]

I don't know if stubbornness is a positive trait. XD

[Altered Tundra]

I don't know if stubbornness is a positive trait. XD

Usually it wouldn't be considered one, but in Shiro's case, it is. It's not the kind where he's reluctant to give up his point of view or whatever would bring up his stubborn attitude, but rather it leads to determination.

[guinness]

Adaptability would be the first trait I could add. She's able to acclimate herself to situations quickly due to seeing it like a role in a play. This could allow her to go undercover if need be. Another trait could be her sociability as she doesn't shy away from conversation nor is she overtly rude to people. The last thing I could come up with is she is ambitious. When she sets her mind to get better at something she doesn't stop practicing until she does.

Hopefully that's enough positive traits because I'm not sure I can think of more without completely changing the character.