Alright- So you changed your stance completely from your initial stance, which was a boxing stance. If you are going to change that’s fine but you should allude to it somehow. Next you draw and fire…only one shot? I can see your actions but you can clean it up. For instance, when you find cover behind a tree…and both hands on the trigger…small things but they can be tightened up.
Carl watched the man with a curious expressions, but as he reached for his pistol, Carl was already moving. Dropping to his right, he rolled on his shoulder and came up on his feet running towards the tree line. Diving for the trees as the explosion of the shot filled the air, he scrambled until he was up against the trunk of a large, thick oak. Fishing in the left pocket of his shorts, Carl pulled out a snap-lock Tanto knife. The echo of the hand cannon that the man had fired finally diminished. Out of the right he pulled out a taser. Biting his lip, Carl peered out around the trunk trying to locate the man with the gun.