I don't know that I have the requisite competence for Advanced, but I'd like to join up. I'll probably be a while before I write up any character.
My thoughts on the aesthetics:
- For the narwhal's in-universe name, I support 'seahorn', and posit 'tourney-whale'. Abbreviation *Hyphen optional.
- I'd think 'The tides stop for none' is the obvious shortening of the motto, although I feel 'The tide stops for none' flows better. Regardless, cutting 'the' could also help.
- I like Rustwater for a name, and Hailstone for a keep, but I think Mistrust should be used somewhere. A port town or a famous ship, maybe? Something historical that makes one wary of that bit of coast.