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  • Entry #1

    0 0%
  • Lost Girl

    0 0%
  • Entry #3

    5 31.25%
  • Entry #4

    3 18.75%
  • Depravity

    1 6.25%
  • Unforgettable

    2 12.50%
  • Id-Eah

    0 0%
  • Entry #8

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  • Entry #9

    0 0%
  • Entry #10

    0 0%
  • Innocence

    0 0%
  • Entry #12

    0 0%
  • Go Away

    1 6.25%
  • Lost

    4 25.00%
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Thread: WOTM #22 Voting (Casual)

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    I just realized that WOTM #22 received 22 entries.

    This amuses me.
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    I had a hard time figuring out which one to vote for, but i ended up going with Entry 3. I felt moved by the descriptive actions and thoughts. I like that it was portrayed as a stuffed teddy bear, and giving that it was abused and loved gave me hope for it. I felt that the bear was soft and passionate in the beginning, but after so much i felt he became evil and decided to get his revenge on joey for all that he put him through. Great story, I loved reading it.

    In college, I am taking "Introduction to Literature" and I feel that I need to give pointers to Innocence and Id-Eah.

    Innocence
    The movement of the poem isn't what one would consider a poem.
    The measure is completely off using some stressed syllables together, such as
    "Her innocence, taking it without consent"
    the beat of the line goes like this

    -l-l-l-l-l-
    you're using iambic pentameter with a substitution from an iam to a single unstressed syllable.
    After the voting is over, you could reveal yourself to me and I would be glad to teach you measurements for poetry.
    Your poem isn't bad, i liked what you did with it. But the final line in the first stanza was too long for it's intended measure.

    Id-Eah
    I'm not gonna lie, it was tough to get the beat of this poem where it isn't so much as iambic pentameter or tetrameter.
    In the lines,
    "Whether I come across a memory of bygone days
    Doesn’t really matter
    Life is just a phase"
    the beats aren't together. Using a longer line then following it with smaller/shorter lines gives way to the beat.
    The rhyme scheme is spot on. I love how you didn't use so many words that were too closely related when using them to rhyme.
    just like i said with the writer of innocence, if you want me to teach you poetic beats i wouldn't mind a bit. It would bring your poem to life.
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    Depravity, Unforgettable, and Go Away are my top 3 choices, with entry #'s 3 & 4 deserving praise as well. I will have to re-read these stories again before making my decision though.

















    Last edited by Kaizen; 02-08-2013 at 11:45 AM. Reason: added reviews

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    I suck at critique writing, so I'm not going to do that. But as I read each story, Depravity and Unforgettable were my top two. I ultimately chose Unforgettable because I am a romantic and I really felt connected to the story. It was something I could relate to.



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    Congratulations Kaizen!



    While Casual had plenty of good entries this time around, and plenty of entries in general, Entry #3 managed to win the majority vote with it's beautifully descriptive tale of an innocent, loving teddy bear turned evil. According to the reviews, this one did a great job telling the story. You can really visualize the Nightmare Bear, and the switch from innocent to evil was wonderfully done. So congrats, Kaizen, on your first WOTM win, and a well-deserved one!

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    Thank you very much, and thank you everyone who entered, voted, and took part in the contest.

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    Kaizen, that story was awesome.


    I am looking forward to the next contest.

    Lots of thanks to Mayhem for the Sig.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Silver carrot View Post
    Kaizen, that story was awesome.


    I am looking forward to the next contest.
    As am I, seeing as how Jorick and I have been hard at work lately pumping out components for tons of great new themes. When the new Theme Choice thread goes up tomorrow all three choices will be brand new themes, and we think you'll quite like the options.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Kagamine View Post
    As am I, seeing as how Jorick and I have been hard at work lately pumping out components for tons of great new themes. When the new Theme Choice thread goes up tomorrow all three choices will be brand new themes, and we think you'll quite like the options.
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    Quote Originally Posted by CommunistZed View Post
    I want to do Poverty.
    Don't worry, Poverty and Fantasy won't be forgotten. They'll make a return someday.

    For now though, I'm really looking forward to this new batch, and I bet you guys'll like them, too. Jorick and I just need another day to finish stuff up and pick out our favorites.
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