All your opinion are belong to me!

[Charlie Sheen]

So this is a little something random I wrote for my Fiance' earlier today, and instead of getting criticism from the people I know personally: Who have the combined intellectual quotient of a banana, I would very much appreciate some feedback from people here.... Be gentle....

YOU NEED TO MAKE ME A SAMMICH!!!!


The end-

Ive been cast out and shut down by the very people I trust. Ive been shunned and disowned by the family I love. Ive been where most men would never go, where most people would never wish to, and Ive survived it all thanks to you. You were my awakening, my new sunrise, my guiding light, and I owe you more than words could express. I was lost in a dark place, a cliche and horrid darkness, but you somehow found me. You carried me like I now carry you. You held me like I now hold you. You saved me like I someday wish to save you: From zombies, or more likely, the burdens of loneliness and sorrow.

You were there for me when I thought the world had given up. When all else failed, when all other roads came to a dead end, you somehow saw through the horrors of my past and awoke something I never knew was dwelling within. Happiness, pure and true. Not the kind you see in movies; or the kind that lasts while playing a game or reading a book, but an indefinite, and soul brightening happiness. You gave to me; willingly I might add, the most precious gift I could never afford on my own.

You gave me back my life.. A life worth living, and a life worth wanting. You stole away my hatred, my fears, and my sorrow, and replaced the nightmares with dreams of a future together. Without you, I would never be who I am now, I would never see what I see now, and I would never have become anything more than another statistic. Another footnote in the lives of those who could care less.

So for being true to me, true to love in a way I thought never existed, I thank you. I thank you from the bottom of my heart, from the depths of my soul, and I shall continue to do so til the last day I spend on earth. You are so much more than my fiance': You are my best friend, my truest companion, and the only women I ever dream of. If the world ends today; and if tomorrow never comes, I will still have lived a happy life, and died a happy man

I love you

[Seravee]

[The Scotsman]

So this is a little something random I wrote for my Fiance' earlier today, and instead of getting criticism from the people I know personally: Who have the combined intellectual quotient of a banana, I would very much appreciate some feedback from people here.... Be gentle....

YOU NEED TO MAKE ME A SAMMICH!!!!


The end-

All your opinions belong to me!

ftfy.

So this is a little something random I wrote for my Fiance earlier today, and instead of getting criticism from the people I know personally, who have the combined intellectual quotient of a banana, I would very much appreciate some feedback from people here... Be gentle...

ftfy. If you didn't notice, I removed an apostrophe, removed a colon (why the fuck was that even there anyway?) and there were too many full stops in both of your eclipses.

And on that note, good day.

[Taaja Hart]

[2]...

[Rainaa]

Who are you?

[Charlie Sheen]

I updated this, and placed the actual writing example in. The first portion was a joke because she was watching me, and I had to wait til she walked away to finish the second... Please do give me opinions though... I want some sort of feedback

[Seravee]

Who are you?

Don't encourage it.

[Rainaa]

Don't encourage it.

It's....trying to bandwagon?
I'm scared, Seravee );

[Charlie Sheen]

Hmm, I could have guessed I would get little more than shunned, but still I hoped for a brief or partial form of feedback regarding what I wrote. Unlike others here, what is wrote does in fact mean something to me.

[Seravee]

I've read it, it is cute, but it will never be as significant to me as it is to you or your fiance. This is something very personal, and I'm not sure what sort of critique you're looking for. I'm sure she'll like it.