Just an idea but see what you think

[Barios]

This is my first time making up a plot but I want your input on how to make it better and hopefully start up a RP so the plot is :

The year is 2389, and a genetics lab called "Crygene" had made an accident which mutated people horrifically into vampires.This was done by following out very long and painful operations. The lab mainly pulled in the homeless off the streets or famous people who wanted their genes enhanced for almost superhero outcomes. But not all the operations were a success. Some screwed up and formed the creature they called "Vampires". The people of the present age hadn't really heard of vampires as the idea of the myth was forgotten apart from in old English books. The lab picked up on the idea and followed out underground experiments to enhance the enhanced. It didn't work very well. Some it worked for, but most it turned them worse. These scientific rejects were normally "Terminated", but the ones which escape were called "Abomination X". Now the experiments are locked into rooms together ready for further testing.


I know it needs work but what do you think?

[Kablamicus]

It seems like a good idea but what would the rpers take the role of, these vampires or the people 'terminating' them?

[Alchemist]

It's a good idea, you have my interest.

[Barios]

Well, i was thinking you could be either and if your confident enough you can play two characters. I'm maybe thinking that the ordinary vampires at some point get asked to help against the Abominations by the scientists, also i would like to make some sort of military character in there which be at the start fighting both vampires and the abominations. Like i said it is a bit rough around the edges so whatever you think would help make it better then please tell me.