To add to what's already been said:
(for want of a better term, the spiky yellow bit is referred to as the "explosion", as I think that's the inspiration for it)
- Ugly, jarring, clashing colours. Colours are also largely pastel-y, if that makes sense, which in this case makes it look tacky, cheap, and unprofessional.
- Lack of unity. The explosion is chaotic, whereas the lower half is ordered, neat, with a sense of symmetry. Content is also at odd ends - an explosion is destructive, and associated with war and violence, whereas rainbows/unicorns are symbolic of virtually the opposite (could comment on use of rainbows in "hippie" culture). Similarly the background makes it look like it's in the sky, which is often associated with freedom and openness. To mention colours again, the gradiented blue background indicates tranquillity in stark contrast with the chaotic red and yellow.
- Clouds are at bottom of picture - this could be a stylistic choice if done deliberately, but if you desperately need more commentary you could mention the clouds seeming out of place at the bottom of the image.
- Triple exclamation marks are just... no.
- Explosion has no source, or reason to be there. The other aspects are, however tenuously, linked. The explosion is utterly unrelated to them all, and the rule of proximity - items that relate to the same thing should be located near to one another - means that explosion should not be pasted over those other things (unless there was deliberate contrast in order to emphasise the meaning of the explosion, which doesn't seem to be the objective in this case).
- Explosion is off-centre, whereas all other components are "centred".
Uh, yeah, it's 2.30am so that's all I got. Some of what I've said is probably horse unicornshit, but oh well.




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