Corrupted And Ruined.[OOC]

[FireBubblez]

It's usually peaceful and quiet in the beautiful kingdom of Selestial. The prosperous kingdom was created by Drasesus Selest, where he got the name for his new kingdom. He conquered lands, and soon gained control of gold trade. He taxed any other trade, and soon grew rich. He used the money for luxury, not caring for his kingdom. The capital city, Molora, where the palace is located, is where most of his money was spent. The people in the city lived luxuriously, and did not care for the other cities, in a horrible state of poverty. Over the years of Drasesus' rule, the city on Molora lived in a beautiful rich life, their life spans avergae at eighty five years old. But in outskirting towns, the average life was twenty-one. His kingdom began to fail, the inhabitants of the other cities dying of disease and starvation.

After Drasesus died, his heir took over. His soon. The surving outskirted towns were afraid that his soon would be cruel and selfish like his father, and they were all right. He made the two of Molora even more perfect. The poor begged to be let in, but big stone walks kept the other people of the kingdom out. Soon, the gold ores ran out. No more gold could be mined. There was nothing else. Drasesus' son, Jorlan, tried his best to live off the little bit of taxing her got from trade. The city of Molora soon began to lose all of its lavished glory.

Jorlan continued striking through gold mines, trying to find more gold. But it was impossible. The world had run out in his region. He soon began to realize the mistake he and his father had made. Instead of using the money wisely. they luxuriated themselves, living comfortably along with the city of Molora, while everybody else suffered. Soon, Molora inhabitants began sending assassins to kill the horrible king who had sent them into poverty. After realizing the Molora citizens' plans, he commited a violent suicide. This is where our story begins. Will the new king be able to get the knigdom running again, or while they all suffer?

1) No Godmodding.
2) No Mary/Gary Sues please.
3) I am the GM. My word is LAW.
4) If you want to drop out, please let me know.
5) Remember this is set in medevial times. No cellphones, soda, etc.
6) No magical powers or anything unless you are a mage.
7) No excessive amounts of mages.
8) Make sure all of the ratios balance somewhat. So I need some people to live in Molora, as well as in the other outer cities.
9) If you'll follow these rules put 'Drasesus is Evil!' in your CS.

Name:

Age[17-25]:

Appearance:

Rank:

Personality:

Background[Optional]:

Weapon:

Location:

Other:

Name: Athena Rozoteh

Age: 17

Appearance: Athena has mid-back length snow colored hair. Her eyes are a beautiful, mezmorizing jade green, and she has a pretty pale complexion. She has scars covering her body, and wears leggings, a tunic, and hunters' boots. Her hair is usually pulled up, half up half down, the up part braided like a crown around her head.

Rank: Low-Class Commoner

Personality: Athena stands up for herself. She hates being treated like a slave, but is too afraid of her owners to speak up. She's a pretty quiet girl, but will speak out when needed. She's an amazing hand fighter, but is awesome with a sword too. She a generally vulnerable character, and submits easily.

Background:[OPTIONAL]

Weapon: Her fists and a long sword.

Location: An outskirted city named Jamino.

Other:

[MidnightLunar]

Name: Serefina imaculas

Age: 17

Appearance: Serefina has brunet hair that just goes past her shoulders and her eyes are diamond blue. Her birth mark was made by the doctor as he was strangely carrying a knife as he pulled Serefina out her mothers womb, on her neck. (yucky) It healed over and seems like its in the shape of a crescent moon. She often wears a long sleeved white top under her hunting jacket, and also wears thick leggings and her leather hunting boots.

Rank: Low class civilian

Personality: Serefina all her life has been seen as a feeble girl, one you could easily kill. So she is very strongly willed and shy, really shy.. So she practiced, and she became a fairly good shooter and sword fighter. She used her feebleness to her advantage to hide what she really could do. So she acts sweet, easy to fool.

Background: TBR?

Weapon: Bow and a quiver of arrows

Location: a poor small town called 'Searinica' (presuming that I can't make up one, Jamino then)

Other: draseseus is evil! And Kira likes spending time hunting!

[FireBubblez]

Lol Accepted Lunar. If you would like your city to be named Searinica, then so be it. I already have a plan on how the characters shall meet up.

Bumpy.

[FireBubblez]

Bumpy.

[MidnightLunar]

Bumpy XD

[FireBubblez]

Come on people! I worked hard on this!

[Azathoth]

The story seems a little lacking

[FireBubblez]

Lacking? If you came here to critisize me, it kinda hurts. I'm a dyslexic. This stupid frickin thread took me five hours to complete, and you're sitting here telling me that it's lacking?! That's a bit rude don't you think?

[Azathoth]

In all fairness, how am I supposed to know about any problem you have in real life? You seemed disappointed that no one was expressing interest, I attempted to tell you why.

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Which I don't usually do.

[FireBubblez]

I never said you knew anything about my real life problems. But you shouldn't just straight up critisize something, that I hadn't asked for help on. My threads don't get much attention anyway, because usually their short. So I go and try my best to make something better, and I still get ignored. I personally don't think it lacks anything. It has background, and it his a typical plot, like my mentors have told me they need. But apparently that isn't enough. I struggle when creating threads, because I'm not the greatest writer. I try my best, and people just straight up diss it. Sometimes it really makes me want to cry, because they don't let me explain myself. It really, reall hurts.