[b]Avery:[/b] - If you need someone to collab with to make the work go a little faster, I'd be happy to help you.

[b]Archangel:[/b] - I can't speak for Lovejoy on this or approve your character, but there are two things. [b]1[/b], I'd recommend you toned down the powers slightly; super-human powers are approaching the realms of power-playing, especially as in the backstory you mentioned him having killed several Inquisitors, who are supposed to be these super-elite soldiers. It overpowers Yorudan and devalues the prowess of the Inquisitors somewhat. [b]2[/b], less important; if you can get a picture it'd be good.

Hope I helped.