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Sorry, but as of right now, there are some problems with your application.

-My very first rule in the original post is that this is an Advanced game with writing standards. I think you need to revise your grammar and there aren't any apostrophes at all.

-Everyone's abilities manifested within the past week, so I'm sorry, but there's no way he can be fifty and look seventeen.

-Even if he was immortal/ageless, you have no points set for it.

-The same applies for your minion. There are no points allotted for it. He would need to have two to three points for a creature from another dimension.

-Remember, if there are no points set in a skill or advantage, he's basically an average joe.

-A lot of our characters are chaotic neutral so far, so im more willing to accept people who are more or less good or evil.

 -I would prefer a more in depth explanation on his powers. Are the shadows intangible? Are they ineffective in daylight? What kind of smoke transformation? It's not designated as teleportation, so does he form into a cloud that floats on the wind?

I dont really want ambiguous profiles, because it leaves room for godly characters