I'm not so sure if I can really impose when I just recently hopped in here, but I'd like to give some advice, Hymusia. You may want to reel back the portrayal of them as a wapanese gothic lolita club. It doesn't really create any creepy dissonance between how they behave and their alleged capacity for violence, it just makes it harder to take them seriously. Likewise, the assertion of the ambiguity of each character's backgrounds doesn't really provoke a sense of mystery so much as leave unexplained why they are the way they are. You may very well have already intended to do this, but might I suggest you go deeper into the reasons behind each of the Malkavian's delusions, as well as less ambiguous details on Leo and Demitri?

Similarly, they're so involved with what amounts to a pop-goth subculture that they don't really fit as low generation vampires, either. I mean, it's not like freak low-generation Embraces aren't a thing that happens sometimes, but that's a whole lot of them in one place, and they aren't particularly tolerated by the Camarilla. To be fair, we've got a lot of people in the RPG who have Generations that are a tad strange, so you can probably get away with ignoring this detail. But honestly? 7th Generation Kindred is pushing it. Assuming embrace took place after CLD published Alice's Adventures in Wonderland, that gives her 147 years at most. But, once again, you can probably ignore this detail - a lot of people seem to already have.

Although Generation lines are blurred somewhat by older Kindred doing Embraces (which isn't often allowed by the Camarilla) and Diablerie, by default in the Final Nights, things tend to even out along the lines of...

1st Generation: Caine
2nd Generation: Caine's 3 childer
3rd Generation: Antediluvians (more like Great Old Ones than people; existed in prehistory before The Deluge circa 5600BC [i]if not longer[/i])
4th Generation: Methuselah ([b]eldritch monsters[/b] closer in nature to Antediluvians)
5th Generation: Methuselah ([b]inhuman monsters[/b] closer in nature to Elders)
6th Generation: Elders ([url=http://oi61.tinypic.com/24b6vx0.jpg]Really old[/url]; Closer in thought-process to inhuman monsters like Methuselah)
7th Generation: Elders (Not going to be here or above unless you're over 200 years old and many are at least twice as old as that; Most don't give a fuck about human mores beyond the Masquerade; everyone probably thinks you're a dick at this stage)
8th Generation: Mature (Ancilla; majority were the Adolescents of the Dark Ages; difficult to maintain human values after having eaten so many people and lived multiple lifetimes)
9th Generation: Mature (Ancilla; Begin to lose human sentiments if they haven't already)
10th Generation: Adolescent (Ancilla; roughly 50 to 150 years; this is the stage where you can actually begin to start making waves)
11th Generation: Adolescent (Freshly not a neonate or about to start becoming an Ancilla)
12th Generation: Modern day Neonates
13th Generation: Neonates of Neonates (believed to be the last actual generation)
14th Generation: Thin-bloods
15th Generation: Thin-blooded progeny of Thin-bloods

This, of course, is not exact, but a general guideline to follow. Just some advice, take it with a grain of salt if you'd like.

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