[quote=Anemone]
I'm not so sure if I can really impose when I just recently hopped in here, but I'd like to give some advice, Hymusia. You may want to reel back the portrayal of them as a wapanese gothic lolita club. It doesn't really create any creepy dissonance between how they behave and their alleged capacity for violence, it just makes it harder to take them seriously. Likewise, the assertion of the ambiguity of each character's backgrounds doesn't really provoke a sense of mystery so much as leave unexplained why they are the way they are. You may very well have already intended to do this, but might I suggest you go deeper into the reasons behind each of the Malkavian's delusions, as well as less ambiguous details on Leo and Demitri?Similarly, they're so involved with what amounts to a pop-goth subculture that they don't really fit as low generation vampires, either. I mean, it's not like freak low-generation Embraces aren't a thing that happens sometimes, but that's a whole lot of them in one place, and they aren't particularly tolerated by the Camarilla. To be fair, we've got a lot of people in the RPG who have Generations that are a tad strange, so you can probably get away with ignoring this detail. But honestly? 7th Generation Kindred is pushing it. Assuming embrace took place after CLD published Alice's Adventures in Wonderland, that gives her 147 years at most. 
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There are reasons to all my characters actions and their not supposed to be 'mysterious' they are simply not fully written as I'd written up the quick bios at about 11pm my time after a full days work and taking care of my two kids. It was a place filler so I didn't forget the ideas I had and the general concepts could be approved before I spent the next several hours working on them. Harley is in fact one of my main VTM characters and there are about 20 full pages of back story on her, her family and her blood line. Why she is who she is and how she became that way. I've changed her some for this game and so her back story will be different but don't presume that she's just some kooky bint or she'll fuck your face with a rusty razor. As I've already pointed out I intend to fill out the character sheets properly when I have the time to do so and until then you should reserve your judgement on the characters I've posted. I didn't sign up for this rp to get the same elitest bull shit I've tried to escape with most VTM platforms.