[quote=Noel]
Alrighty, feedback time again. So, chukklehed, the basic ideas look fine... but could use more detail. She'd say it would benifit from some lengthening and fleshing out, the background in particular. You also missed the age section.
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I left the background purposefuly obscure because her past is the entirety of her Shadow's speech. I can look at the other sections and try to add more there, But I can only add a few more details to the background without giving that whole scene away. Also dammit age, you foiled me again!