If you're mimicking her speech, dont do that

Anyway... she really hates to be so critical... but shes having trouble really finding it believable. Not sure why terrorists would be going after one random persons house for money. Thats like... more just common gang activity who would be more likely just to shoot someone than bomb the place. She hates to nitpick on grammar too, but some of it feels awkward after reading it over a few times, could use some proof reading. 

[s]hrnnng, she hates being the critical one. She always ends up sounding like a bitch. [/s]