[quote=Baklava] @Kai: Oh man. That song-- right in my old 13 year old otaku. *cue tear of nostalgic reminiscence* If you could convert that link into the same form as everyone else, however, that would be preferable. With the personality section... I can definitely sympathize with the longing to delve into greater detail when describing your character's personality-- hoping and praying that everybody understands and adores your OC in the same way you do, but for consistency's sake and also because I would like the characters' personalities to come to light more in the IC, I'm going to have to ask that you simplify it into a simple list of adjectives. We'll get a chance to see what he's really like once the IC starts up. Also, I'm afraid it's rather impossible for Idris to be a direct descendant from Impa since it's been hundreds of years since she was alive-- given she isn't immortal. He could still be related to her, but not so directly. As for his skills: Shiekah Training seems suuuuper vague. Judging by your description of it, however, I don't see why you don't simply rename it "Shiekah Stealth". And with the Parkour/Balance bit-- and this is just my opinion, not something required-- I think all you really needed to title it was Parkour and the description seems unnecessarily long. I think most people know what the definition of parkour is, so all you really need to say is that he's a trained Shiekah warrior that has trained a lot in this specific Shiekah/ninja skill (or something along those lines) With Geokinesis... Turning things into diamonds really doesn't seem like a skill a beginner should have unlocked yet. The hardening of rocks/minerals/etc. itself, I think, should be a move entirely of it's own anyway. Just saying he has control over everything earth-related on top of that seems really vague and on the brink of OP, although I do acknowledge the fact that you were obviously trying to make it so it wasn't. Start with either Earth-moving (and make sure to specify the weight/amount of earth he is able to move) or earth hardening/softening and if you're good he can gain the other ability a bit later. That's what I would highly SUGGEST for Geokinesis, but it's not at all required and totally up to you. Trying to keep my influence over character creation as light as possible here. Oh, and make sure you number the skills also! But otherwise-- everything else is golden. Good job. [/quote] My personality.....