[quote=Darkraven]A very minor detail is the race bit. White refers to skin colour.[/quote]

The term [url=http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Non-Hispanic_Whites]"Non-Hispanic White"[/url] is one that is fairly common in the United States, particularly on official government or military paperwork. Anybody who's done standardized testing at school has likely seen the term, which has come into use because of the large percentage of "White Hispanic" American citizens who do not identify themselves as Caucasian.

[quote=Darkraven]Another thing would be the 'previous vocations' bit. It's not referring to previous jobs outside of military/paramilitary/police/security organisations.[/quote]

Honestly, I kind of figured that this section was for previous military specialties, and I used the civilian job because my character's only military profession has been the one she has. I imagined it was just a job she had as a teenager, and it's not going to have any real weight on the story or her as a character, but I hate to see a blank spot on a character application, and it's slightly unrealistic to say that a character has NEVER had a job before.

[quote=Darkraven]Also, I sure hope you know what your character's getting into, Pete. In being a member of the United States military, she's going to be looked down upon as the US sphere of influence is quickly deteriorating and so is their reputation.[/quote]

Yeah, I can see that that's going to be a problem that arises pretty early on in the roleplay. It's also an important foundation underneath the character's very existence. The only reason she was [i]sent[/i] to UNXIPU over any other service member, was to make a statement. It's something that the American military loves to do, and as one of the first successful female infantrymen in a country that had lagged behind in the integration of women into combat roles, she's something that the Pentagon sent as more of a "look at us", than anything else. I understand from the description of the world as it is that the United States is going to hell in a handbasket real quick, but I can't see the American military industry falling completely apart within six years, so although the United States is being surpassed by competing superpowers, the American military is probably still a fairly competent fighting force, and sending a message like LCPL Campbell to represent the country is something that brass would do.

Correct me if I'm wrong on any of that.

[quote=Darkraven]Well, at least in the beginning, though I can't say what's going to happen to that later on.[/quote]

Once the bullets start flying, I imagine a lot of the animosity will be lost.

[quote=]But so far, I like the character. [...] A few days max. Do tell me once she's ready and I'll add it into the accepted characters list.[/quote]

I believe I've addressed your concerns. If you want me to, I can still edit the issues you had, though. Thanks much.