[quote=Sathanas Rex] Well, from the whole insecure personality deal, I thought she wouldn't take it up on herself to lead the others. [/quote] Haruka is obsessed with be strong; stronger; the strongest(!) and she will do anything to achieve this goal (read Special Traits; Will of Steel). Being insecure (as she is) is a sign of weakness and a sign of weakness she is not willing to show. She might get mad when told she is clumsy or stupid and she might get depressed when told that [i]real[/i] ninja use [i]Ninjutsu[/i], but she will never admit it to the one that has hurt her. (Actually, I'm adding that to the CS...) In Haruka's (rather slow (read Special Traits; Not the Sharpest Tool in the Shed)) mind, being the [i]leader[/i] is a position of [i]power[/i], being in a position of [i]power[/i] means being [i]stronger[/i] than the ones that follow you ... You see where this is going? It's all about being [i]the strongest[/i] in her mind. [quote=Halvtand] I really Can't find much to bitch about here. Mostly because she's been with us before and has been fixed so many times there's not really anything left to do. We even spend a good deal of an afternoon just talking about her A-rank, so even that's good in my book. [/quote] Wait a minute... Something is not right here. You [i]don't[/i] have [i]anything[/i] to bitch about? This must be a miracle! But yeah, I get where you're going. Your dood seems good, too. (because I totally read it through [s]and not only skimmed it[/s]). [hider=Shadowcatcher] Okay, first things first, I suppose. I really don't like doing this (mostly because everyone else loves your design and I used to do the same thing myself (making Css pretty)), but please fit your character sheet to the format I have submitted. The point of a character sheet is for it to be easily accessible information on the character, not a pretty thing. Please write the name of the nature transformation/chakra nature/whatever you want to call it, instead of only putting an image. The same goes for the “Loyalty” section (one of the images is broken, anyways). As fun as theme songs are (I always give my characters one, just for myself), they are not to be submitted in the sheet. Sorry. You are free to post is as a separate thing, though. About the missions... She could have taken missions in Kiri, but I very much doubt that they'd send a genin with a heart deficiency out on A-rank missions, which are for Jounin. No B-rank, either, since those are for [i]experienced[/i] chuunin. That single S-rank one is completely out of the picture. It would be possible for her to have a few (but certainly not twenty) C-rank missions to her name, as these are meant for experienced genin and new chuunin. D-ranks are fine. [b]Name:[/b] [i]Haruhi Suzumori[/i] Japanese people write their surname first, and since you keep refering to her as “Haruhi” and “Haru” later on in the sheet, I assume that that is her first name. Small detail, but it counts. Also... Haruka and Haruhi are gonna be confused about names all the time, since they are both called “Haru” for short :-P [b]Personality:[/b] [b]History:[/b] I'm sorry to say, but I could barely read through this due to the bad grammar and spelling mistakes. English is not my first language (very far from it, in fact (my fifth, in fact) and as such, I have a hard time reading it when it is not correct. I can accept a few typos and a “there” instead of “their” once or twice in a sheet, but this, I cannot accept. Please fix the spelling and grammar and I will give you a proper review of this section. This does not mean that I did not read it, I just want to add. I did. And I do have some issues with it, I just want you to fix the grammar first. [b]Weapons or Items[/b] [i]Standard Shinobi Tools[/i] No... Just no. There is no such thing as “standard shinobi tools”. What is “standard” differs from person to person. Sasuke carries ninja wires with him; are those standard? Some, such as Haku and Anko, use senbon; are those standard? Do you have soldier pills? Bandages? A water flask? Kunai? Shuriken? Makibishi? Nutrition bars? If you do, how many do you have? Five of each? Ten of each? Twenty of each? Where do you keep it? In your pockets? In a backpack? A satchel? Your custom weapons are fine, though. I don't mind those. I have something like the second one attached to my belt, though ;-P [b]Skills/Abilities[/b] [b]Special Traits[/b] Please take a look at the other sheets for what to do here; write and explanation of the trait, like everyone else. [B]Cannon Jutsu[/b] Kage Bunshin is a Konoha ninjutsu. Kiri ninja typically use Mizu Bunshin if they want solid clones. Chidori is an A-rank technique, takes bunches of chakra to use. It was also invented/created by Kakashi and as such would not only not exist yet, but it would be [i]highly[/i] unlikely that anyone outside of Konoha would have learned it. “Chakra Enhanced Strength” was invented/created by Tsunade, a Konoha ninja. [b]Custom Jutsu[/b] These seem fine, although I am wondering what the point of coating the whip-thing in chakra is in the Heavenly Shark Rain technique? [/hider] [quote=Njorne]Explaining things[/quote] I read this through, but my eyes are crossing from reading too much right now, so I'll give it another look in a minute (or hour) and I'll give you a proper review on it, 'kay? [quote=Pasta Sentient] You inspired me Shadow! Added color to my pic. I'm horrible at editing, but it's better than nothing! [/quote] … I made Haruka's appearance images myself … Your image looks way better with color, though. Nice work. .:EDIT:. Dammit, I missed something. Shadowcatcher, about that hitai-ate (forhead protector) image you posted as an idea for Gobigakure no Sato... How does it fit the name of the village (Village Hidden by the End)?