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Awesome post Aeon! Very interesting developments.... B)
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Why thankyou. Next post will be just a little more interesting.
If for any reason someone no longer wants to be in Deadland let me know, there will be no hard feelings, and I won't try to talk you out of it. I'm sure you all know what you want.

Just a friendly notice, I'm not telling anyone to leave. I just know dropping rp's is kind of an anxiety thing, so I'd rather be told. Otherwise things are going great :D
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it's my fault that we're delayed.

my schedule is ridiculous but i am working with Fire every chance I get, honest.

we have a good bit so far but we're still not done yet.

apologies, i warned you via pm Ae that i was afraid of holding everyone up.

if it get's too unbearable for you guys i am willing to kill Vera off.

i know what it's like waiting & it blows but i am trying.
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my schedule is pretty crazy too hun, but we gotta stay and fight ^.^ Don't leave us yet! I will be posting when I can I hope ya'll aren't waiting on me for too long. I finally have some good amount of time to post tonight. Aeon. Is the Samurai supposed to be Lauren? ^^;; you made her so serious

----Whoop nvm just got caught up in the ooc ^^'''''

Also Aeon o3o wheres the faction CS you said you'd have? I have my faction pretty much planned out
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I hope it's alright that I'm waiting for the collab to be done, I don't want to potentially mess up what the others are doing. I'm also caught off-guard by the fact that school is starting again a week sooner than I thought it was so I'm using up every minute of my last few days of vacation ^^;

I'm not at all bothered by delays in posts, I still always check the OOC/IC at least once a day :)
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thanks for being understanding. ^^

we should be done by Saturday the latest, I believe.

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No worries, I just wanted to make sure everybody was still around ^_^

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my schedule is pretty crazy too hun, but we gotta stay and fight ^.^ Don't leave us yet! I will be posting when I can I hope ya'll aren't waiting on me for too long. I finally have some good amount of time to post tonight. Aeon. Is the Samurai supposed to be Lauren? ^^;; you made her so serious----Whoop nvm just got caught up in the ooc ^^'''''Also Aeon o3o wheres the faction CS you said you'd have? I have my faction pretty much planned out


I did say that, but I've been a little busy, as you all are now currently. I'm not trying to rush anybody, but if you could just give me some time to get that up. My girlfriend is down for a bit (about 6 days) so if I have time I'll get it up, but I may not. Sorry for the delay on that, if you want to do what Fire did with the creature CS than by all means you're welcome to wing it, and if I feel it's missing something I'll let you know. I just haven't had much time to do all of the things I've wanted to do. I apologize.
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I should be able to have a post up tomorrow evening... Which would be early morning for you, Aeon, I think.
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It will be, but I'm out for a couple of days, my girl is down. We're planning a vacation to vegas, phoenix, and cali and chilling.
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Fire & I will have our post done by then,

promise. ^^

it's going to be a long one.
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No problemo, looking forward to it. You're good until Wednesday at least :)
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Hope you like it. *tips hat*
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I'll post when I can ^.^ thank for being so understanding
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Fire & I are almost finished with our collab. ^^
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Okay guys, today is my last free day before school starts, so if I'm absent for a bit, just know I'm probably dying. I'll be busy today but I'll try my best to finish up Levi's and mine collab .
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No worries, I appreciate the check-ins :)

Planning a vacation is hard -.- ... my brain hurts D:
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I like the post Kapu, though next time we do something like this you should add in the dialogue because it will show perspective from your character, rather than how mine perceives her.


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What do you mean? Like, a proper collab rather than just me giving you a few pointers? Or was it about my own post? Because if that's the case then I don't know what you're talking about :/
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No no, the pointers method worked nicely. I'm talking about your post.

When you got to the scene where the crazy mechanic and eli converse, you kind of just generally skipped it. I was saying, in my opinion, it makes for a better post if you add it in to your post, since you know what Eli is going to say to her.

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”You,” He said, pointing at a the literal definition of a samurai, at least she looked like one. Hell she was even Japanese to boot, ”Why exactly are you here samurai? I doubt it's honor.” Eli said, blatantly throwing that jab at her. She seemed to take it stoically, unflinching.

”"The reward, mainly. Good materials are hard to come by, so getting a cut of 18.000 credits that I can use? No way in hell I'm gonna say no to that." She glanced away, just for a moment as she spoke. It was a curious tell, something you looked for in liars, but Eli was no interrogator, despite the charade he was putting up.
"What makes me think you won't become dead weight" He asked, staring at her intently.

"Mention one guy here who can repair a weapon on the field should it get damaged. Right, I thought so. Plus, a sniper is never deadweight, nor is someone who can kill without a sound." She said haughtily, apparently quite confident in her abilities. He also liked that, confidence. He moved on.


A conversation has two perspectives, and this only shows the conversation from Eli's side. We have no idea what your character's thoughts and emotions are. Just mine.

By adding the conversation again in your post, we'd then see if from your character's perspective, which helps us build a better understanding of your character, while furthering character development.

It's more of an "in my opinion" thing, you don't -have- to, but I feel it makes a better experience. You don't have to edit this post, I just wanted to give you a pointer/tip/suggestion/etc.
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Aah. Now it makes sense... and yeah, I see your point. I did kinda put it in, but only as a sort of glance. I can't do it right now, but I'll see if I can't make a few changes tomorrow.
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