There's one major issue: There's on cheese! There must be cheese! Lovely cheese!

It might be a touch sparse in the how of his getting to join the bandit clan and so forth, and not much to explain why he wants to be something different, but that doesn't change the fact that this is worlds better than v.1. Not sure how it'll work, but then there's only one real way to discover that.

we're not in the mood to nitpick today.