@ Apokalipse
It's great to see that you've revised your cs, you neatly took care of Ellri's critisism. So far that I'd say, good job.

However, (you felt it coming, didn't you? ^_^' ) me and Ellri have a shared concern and I thought of a suggestion. 

[hider=First off, the concern:]
In Lavica's bio, you stated that her mother told her that "It is not their fault, it was how they were raised. You cannot teach these old dogs new tricks.”. This statement doesn't really fit into the mindset of a woman raised in- and molded by a society like Kalnach's, because from the imagined view, virtually all the women there, at least the non-PC ones, have pretty much embraced the fact that women are mere objects for all intents and purposes owned by the men. Most women there simply don't see any reason for change, be it due to generations of despair or because they rather like how things are (a relative of the Stockholm syndrome being the cause of the latter.).[/hider]

[hider=Now for the suggestions/constructive feedback:]
1. Perhaps it would be better if her mother said something along the lines of "this is just the way it has always been, there's no need for anything to change", as a representative of the way the people of Kalnach think. After thinking about this for herself, Lavica might come to the conclusion that it's due to the way the people of Kalnach are raised, that they think the way they do. 

2. I personally can't help but feel that perhaps it would be a good idea if Lavica has come across Kalesian writings during her secret nightly library adventures, or someone told her about that other way of thinking. This would make her unorthodox ideas concerning woman's rights more logical or at least give her a starting point from which she could develop her "odd" ideas in Kalnach. [/hider]

I hope you can forgive me for being so strict with you, but it's rather important to make sure our foreign character's histories and mindsets correspond to their societies'. However, on a positive note: I would like to point out that I find it impressive that you took on the challenge of creating a character who originated from a country created by another person. You did a good job as far as I (and my fellow gm's are/) am concerned. 

Now enough with the flattery and feelings of guilt for being strict *puts on my strict GM-face* [b]FIX IT![/b]