@Savato First things first. While I don't see a particular problem with the schizophrenia since I've seen characters with similar setup the bulimia thing worries me. We're not a slice-of-life RP where you try and make a character as dramatic as you can to awaken empathy among the readers or other RPers. I don't see the bulimia thing adding anything to her character besides a 'gimmick' that doesn't really affect her day-to-day (yes I know bulimia does affect you day to day but we're shinobi, we're not gonna be RPing about breakfast or stuff, it'll be missions, awesome plots, deceit and power battles.) I'm unsure of your relationship with bulimia but personally I don't handle those kind of 'diseases' well and I usually find myself getting into arguments with people about it. I'm not saying it's necesarily bad. I'm just asking and saying that.. how do you see this fitting into the RP and your character? Because I don't see it. There's a reason you wrote a lot about the schizophrenia (it's an important aspect of your character) and meanwhile the bulimia was merely worthy of.. what. 2 sentences? Moving on. [quote]-Absolutely fearless, a hero never cowers from dangers! -It's impossible to break her will. Without specific training, torturing her is useless. Her mind is capable of such ridiculous mental gymnastics that she's even able to convince herself she doesn't know the information she's supposed to protect that she needs a specific kind of hypnosis from her employers to make her remember it. -Pain is not limiting factor for a hero! ... Unless it's that bad! -Her thin body and slim look make her pretty damn quick on her feet. -Her chakra is huge because of her Prophet status (however control isn't there yet) [/quote] 5 very powerful and useful strengths. Alright. [quote]-Pretentious, arrogant and reckless. She's extremely impulsive in everything she does. -Her pride is that bad. -Low level of endurance. Her bulimia deprives her of enough energy to keep up for too long, and this endangers her teammates in the process. -Relatively feeble. Her body is pretty damn frail with such a thin silhouette. . [/quote] 4 weaknesses.. If you want to balance it well it should be 5, or these 4 should be considerately REALLY big weaknesses. So let's see. 2 personality weaknesses that can be considered pro/con weaknesses (they have good and bad aspects to them). Pride is that bad. How is this a weakness for example? You can say 'never knows when to give up' or you can say 'persistent until victorious'. I just don't see this being a good, balancing weakness. Same goes for your first weakness. These are traits. Not weaknesses. A trait is something usually to do with personality and that might have good/bad aspects. Weaknesses are purely negative and might be about body or maaaaaaybe a certain attitude, as long as you can prove it's negative. In this case you can't. Last two are alright. Feeble should mean she gets thrown around easily etc which is all perfectly fine and a good example of a good weakness. Your kekkei genkai.. not sure. I like the idea but that's just in my head so I need clarification: these are not specifically passive abilities that you listed in the KG description, right? This is just what it entails? Because you list for example: even completely alters its reality all together. Wow. What? You can /change/ reality? Or is this just a possibility for only the greatest users of the KG (basically, the founder of the family)? As for jutsu, if these are the things she are capable of regarding her KG and [b]just[/b] these things then I think it might be alright. I just need to get some things straight: X axis. Does this just mean that you won't be affected by hard punches in the manner of pushback/whatever? Like, if you are moving and have a cheek puffed, someone rams you in the face, you stop dead in your tracks instead of flying back, but still take full damage and every respective effect of the hit such as unconsciousness (which would dispell the technique anyway) or a dislocated/broken jaw? Y axis I like. A good, simple genjutsu which is easy to dispell cause you will notice that everything is mirrored quickly, but not so simple that you can notice instantly. Z axis. I don't mind flying, but 20 meters is too much. And I don't find time an effective weakness. Time is incredibly hard to measure in RP, especially in naruto where everything happens really fast and you have to keep that in mind. Also time is a limit and not a weakness. Add something like, wind is extremely effective when she is flying because she will get blown away. Or the flying weakens her bone structure because of lightening her body, thus making her even more frail and will take more damage from hits. [quote]Weakness: It's not that strong yet, calm your titties.[/quote] You've been saying this a lot -- this is not a weakness. This is a limit of the techniques strength. And since it's not a basic technique, a set-up technique or a gimmick technique I wouldn't say it doesn't need a weakness. --- @Nightrunner I just wish you'd link the Bashoshen to a narutopedia page, but that aside it looks fine. Jutsu are well balanced, you have a weaker form of my jutsu which is fine. I think your weakness on the spinning technique is a really good example of a weakness. [quote]His three older brothers were used to harden him, often sneaking him along on their own missions as Genin.[/quote] ?? You think this would work if there was a jonin? I think maybe the history of beating [i]every[/i] opponent is a bit too much as I kinda envisioned it like 10 guys standing around your character in a courtyard, then attacking him. There wouldn't be room for maneuvering a lot (guerilla tactics) so he'd be kinda forced to take it defensively. He probably wouldn't last because he'd be up against jonin and other such ranked characters. If you still imagine him winning this then he has to be a genius of some sorts, like a genius of defense. I'd be okay with that. Not sure if the others are. He fits the Hanamoto characteristics really well. I guess you could consider him accepted on my end, if you ignore the comments about history.