[quote=Dblade26]
Also you completely made up a race of aliens rather than going with anything Dragonball or Dragonball Z related at all, but frankly that seems like the least worrying part of all that considering the other stuff.
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[quote=clanjos]
Well, given that a lot of his attacks are lifted from freaking Darkseid, the rather generic personality, and wangsty backstory...Also: Power Level 500. Hunting down being strong enough to destroy a planet. Something seems a bit off here.
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I find myself agreeing on this points, honestly I had to go read your bio when I saw these responses. The good thing about DBZ is there are tons of races out there, some of which are probably unknown for sure. I don't think having your own made up species is a bad thing, in fact if you play it out well enough adding on to the DBZ lore is a good thing in my mind. I wanted to do this with Zabura and the Demon race because this particular race was never really delved into in the show, and was a small time filler at best. Although I feel some things were conflicting in this case. For one your power level, I know that there is a set level at which you must be, but being who your character is, I think their power level is a bit too low to coincide with the background story. My character has started out with the same power level, but is also King of the Demon realm, to counter act the change in his power level (cuz lets face it a Demon king with a max power level of 500 is BS) so I made it so that his power depends on dark energy, energy which is not very common on earth so his power is dramatically cut down. However if he were to return to the Demon realm his power would be very much dangerously high. If your race was the most powerful race or almost the most powerful in the galaxy and your character was the pinnacle of this power then that would mean the rest were weaker then you were, and given the various races in the galaxy including Saiyans, Frieza's race, even the Demon race a.k.a Badura, this would stand to say that they were not. Don't get me wrong I am not nit picking or trying to disprove your character or their story or even be mean, but I feel like it could be a bit better when it comes to the execution. Otherwise it just seems like he is a big brute with not much personality to him. Anyways its not my decision and I am sure iv rambled on long enough.