@AliceInRedHeels Ah okay, now I sorta get it, it's a balance issue. Yeah, I don't mind elaborating on some weak points at all. I'll put more detail into the CS proper, but the basic idea is just that her defense would be weak (she doesn't wear any armor or even pseudo-digital-armor, favouring mobility instead) and the fact that she has no range at all I think would be a huge drawback. What if we fought, say, somebody with a lot of armor? Covered in spikes? She'd need to be very strategic about how she approached certain situations, and she'd always be at risk.
And again... I appreciate the points you're putting forward towards her cynicism, and I can kind of see where your skepticism comes from, but it's exactly as you say. She is pretty angry at the world. She doesn't like the way society works, and she probably would complain about it from time to time. Look at her bio, I think a little disillusionment with the perfect vanilla illusion might be a bit justified.
But if possible, I'd like to address the actual worry you're facing that you'd make me want to change it? Rather than "isn't that a bit intense" are you saying "I don't want to be around a potentially obnoxious character like that?" In which case I'd have to ask you to just trust in my writing, I guess, rather than basing your whole fear off of a bullet point on a character sheet.
I'm really sorry I'm sticking so hard on this, but it just sounds like you just worry that she's immature, and I can't say that I think that's entirely valid just from one bullet point and a sentence describing it. I feel like maybe there's a specific thing that you're worried about that lies beyond that character trait that I'm just not understanding. I've never had/seen a problem with having a character run their mouth a little bit or be a 'Dolorous Edd' (in Ice and Fire terms.) And I can't confidently address an issue that I can't fully understand. Do you feel like I'm just going to be an ass about it (much like I'm making an ass of myself right now, probably?)
Sorry, I feel like I'm ranting, and sticking too hard to this. It's not that I feel like I'm being attacked, rather I feel like I'm the one doing the attacking, and I'm not trying to. But if I toned it down without totally understanding where you're coming from, I'd just end up changing a blip on her CS and RPing her the exact same way I otherwise would have, and that doesn't sound like an actual solution to the problem.
@Genkai Since you asked for a ping, and I'm not sure how much you're discussing with your co-gms,
My response to your feedback may still need a look-through. Or if Alice's last points covered it, works fine for me too, just thought I'd point it out to make your life a little easier if you still wanted to address it.
If you end up not having any more to add, my own post above will probably be my last rebuttal to the subject. I don't want to be fighting this much over a character sheet that is, from my understanding, mostly fine. I feel like I'm just wasting time beyond this, and I can argue in circles for days. So please do speak up about what I addressed above (and any other lingering issues, if there are any) and otherwise, I'll just change what I'm asked to change. It's just not worth the effort if you're not gonna be happy with it, and it's not like I want to be alienated out of the RP before it's even begun. But as I stated above, if I could get a better understanding of what exactly the major worry is other than 'cynicism sounds a bit extreme' then I'd be more confident making a change you'd be happy with, or maybe putting your worries to rest anyway.
Also sorry if I missed anything in the big wall of conversation. I'm guilty of only skimming through that, so if I've missed some feedback do let me know please.
EDIT: After speaking a bit with Alice in PM, I've changed the flavour text a bit. It now reads as follows:
"Karako gets along well with individuals, but doesn't like 'society' as a whole. It's not as though she wants to pick a fight with everyone for no reason, but instead, she has the sort of mindset that makes her the first to laugh at a bad situation, or the first to get angry when things get unfair. She expects the worst, and it's hard to shock her when things turn south. But in return, she tends to complain a lot about nothing, and take a pessimistic outlook on life."
Maybe that will settle some of the worries about her? I'm leaving up everything I said before for reference, but if that's good enough, let me know.