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I meant that I could not criticize it. 


The fIrst IC post might be something we could react to, like a description of what is happening where our characters are. The sounds of battle, or the calm of a House? Do we see something? Is someone talking to us? The more personal, real time events of the story where we begin. These things aRe not in the OOC so I think you could use them to write something.


Like I might post something in response to a post like that (say that you post we're on the run and we meet straggled footmen of the enemy, I post that my character shouts "More foes ahead!" to warn our group and slows down slightly to unhinge his weapon as they engage.), while there's nothing like that I can respond to in the story you have in the OOC because that's more a "what is going on in the world" than "what is happening right here" kind of text.


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:>. 


Is this the kind of response that was helpful to you?