[quote=@AllIsOne] I was thinking that the tracking might be a bit too OP too. Alright, I'll fix it up, but for the next 24 hours I won't be able to be active here, so expect it to be ready in like 26 hours. [/quote] Awesome, thank you~! Just because you mentioned it, I'm working tonight and tomorrow, so I'll only be on sporadically as well. [quote=@BCTheEntity] [@Orior] I'll go over points as I come to them. Formatting: I was not aware that there was a set character sheet at all. I didn't see any links or anything to it, so... that'd be my fault, I suppose. I can modify him to fit that character sheet, [s]if you could make the link and/or the sheet itself more obviously present[/s] apparently you already did that, so we'll see how that works out. OPness: Yeah, that one's my bad. To be honest, I'm somewhat used to playing in settings where versatility doesn't directly correspond to power, and I guess I got carried away. That being said, if you could recommend suitable replacement spells for those, I would greatly appreciate it. Character development: To be fair, how a character develops can have nothing to do with how strong they are. For instance, Superman's story is for all intents and purposes one of character development, with any strength enhancement being incidental to this. Then again, a great many people despise Superman for how powerful he is at all, so who am I to judge? But again, I'd greatly appreciate it if you could recommend suitable replacements for those spells, and I'll most likely modify Voel's biography to match. Then again, I could just go straight in on that Kenshiro idea... Semantic issues: I'd like to know what these are. I'd rather get rid of them sooner rather than later, and I'm sure future signees would appreciate the fixes too. EDIT: In fact, screw it, I'm going all-in on this Kenshirexpy idea. I evidently don't expect him to ever develop ludicrous insta-kill moves of that sort, but all things considered, I think I'm close enough to that sort of character anyway that a slight change won't be too difficult. [/quote] [s]You aren't the only one to wonder where the CS is, so I'm going to make the link more noticeable in the OP. I can give you some replacements no problem, and I'll make them work as best I can to your back story, give you a couple different to choose from and PM you. I HATE superman for that exact reason - development is in no means based on the physical aspect, but what's the point and where's the fun of playing someone who can't be challenged? [s]I've also never really seen much development of superman at all, but I haven't read all the comics so I digress.[/s] That was why I was kinda apoloegtic when I said it, because I didn't make it clear in the OP so that was my fault. The semantics weren't important and I fixed them in OP; it was really just that a magic style is supposed to be an explanation, but I hadn't even included it before in the CS. ...I-Is that the same as that Guts guy, or is he different? I was going to try and not have to make you change your background, although by all means you can.[/s] Oh ok! Hold on, reviewing the last two CSes.