[@Wintergrey] Hmmm.... My main gripe with Astrid at the moment is that she seems pretty one-dimensional at the moment. I mean, I'm not asking for too much, but this sheet is pretty barebones. I would like a bit more detail in the personality and backstory sections. [url=http://www.reddit.com/r/WritingPrompts/comments/28vbfi/ot_looking_to_develop_your_characters_heres_100/]This site[/url] can help you. Of course, if you need ideas, I (And someone else) can certainly help you.

I also think there should have been greater repercussions for burning down an entire business. NEST probably offers a "first one" deal for first manisfestors, but they'll probably place her in a special holding place for burning down a building. Not to mention this could open her up to one hell of a lawsuit. lol

Also, can you, uh, rewrite her power section so that's it's a paragraph like the other sheets instead of a list? That list just looks weird.

And please change that last name. It be making me cringe.

You're not rejected, Astrid just needs a little work.