well I put it in a hider, fixed and shorted up the history somewhat, explained his activity the last few years (I figure he will become active due to either my other char showing up seeing their past together, or because stuff started to happen near his warehouse)
tried to put down and lessen his powers somewhat
added 3 years to his age
and tried my best with the grammar, capital letters and punctuations

please say so if its still not enough, if possible also some tips and such if its still bad
so yeah....