[@Kartoffel]

Hmm, overall there's nothing wrong, but I'd like you to go a little more indepth than what you have. Maybe more detail, preferably a picture, for your appearance. Also more detail on your personality, Jack seems like a flat character. The skills look unfinished. And I feel like there are some things you can add to his history. For example, how did his mom die? 

Sorry for all the demands. If you're going to expand Jack as a character in the RP, that's fine, but otherwise see if you can adjust.