Aside from the missing relations, your sheet is perfectly ok, [@Rtron].

here are some points of review, [@Themerlinhawk]. In between browsing two (or more) different browser tabs, a scattered memory and several IRC discussions, it'll perhaps be a bit chaotic in order of events.


You mention an attack upon Korriban? When exactly would that have been? was it the one in 3660?
His favoring a specialized version of Niman even as he has expertise in Makashi feels unusually skilled for his being only 31 years old. Perhaps it would work better to have it as being quite skilled with a single hybrid form that is made up of those two forms, with that nifty idiosyncrasy that is switching blades on the dual lightsaber?

Why is he incapable of regular mind tricks? And how does that work with him having once tried a darker derivative of mind tricks (drain knowledge)? We like the idea of someone not having access to certain "basic" abilities, but feel a reason is needed for it.

The mention of supposedly having used Force Lightning feels tacked on much more than the drain knowledge bit. We suggest fixing up the Drain Knowledge section and removing the Lightning.
There is no requirement to be able to fall to the dark side as an adult that you have to have tasted the dark side during your youth. More jedi fall from the ends justifying the means than fall from being weak in resisting the dark side when they're young.

Using Tutaminis to block things like a lightsaber, especially for more than a second or two, requires mastery of the power, not merely extensive training. It could block weaker training sabers, though.

Echo will enforce some serious control over any use of Force Sight, due to it having extreme usefulness in this RP.

Why would Alat only have one friend and ally within the Jedi temple? If he were in the Sith academy, that small a number makes sense, but among the Jedi it doesn't. Especially considering how he was found early, as that would mean he'd go through the full range of initiate years and training before becoming a padawan. You can have few close friends, but no other friends at all doesn't make sense. 

Finally, the bit about lightsaber instructor feels a touch off... 
[quote]Alat is one of the temples saber instructors when he is stationed there and provides instruction in Niman, Makashi and Trakata variations on the two forms.[/quote]
In line with the lightsaber combat suggestion above, this would make sense to alter a bit. Being a teacher in both Niman and Makashi as well as using Trakata for those two forms is a very wide range, especially for his relative youth. 
Perhaps he instructs novices in Niman/Makashi and all types of students in integrating Trakata into those styles? 
Or perhaps he's a teacher in making a hybrid of those two styles and a specialist in training others in Trakata?

Everything else was pretty much good.