[@hoopadoop]
I am saying that I'll take another look at your sheet once you get a bit more familiar with the site and roleplaying in general. 

As for the look I did: The sheet has a lot of problems with grammar. Garrison can't have a military backstory. The Framewerks already have neural connections with their pilots if that wasn't made clear yet, so it's redundant. The field generator will either have to take up the secondary weapon slot or not be included at all. The techno-babble irks me due to the fact that it looks like you threw it around to make the sheet look more impressive than it is. Am I supposed to deduce that the primary weapons are the mecha's fists? If I was, then the primary weapon section failed in its purpose of explaining it clearly. Using fists instead of weapons does not equal low offensive power, so you'll either have to drop the high armor or the high speed.

If this is the level of writing I'm going to expect from you, then I recommend you seek another RP.