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[WIP]

Name: Solaris "The Jack" Nightwing
Age: 35
Birthday: 1-7

Magic: Solaris can use illusion magic as well as small amounts of fire, ice make and requip.

Illusion: Solaris can make anybody see or hear whatever he wishes. He prefers to use this over his other types of magic as he doesn't care for physical combat as much.

Fire: With this, Solaris can throw small fireballs or cover his fists in flames to add a burning effect to his punches.

Ice Make: Solaris can create shields, barriers, walls and other obstacles to prevent his opponent from reaching what they wish to get to if needed.

Requip: Solaris has 1 set of armor known as the Alicorn and a single sword known as the Winged Horn.
The Alicorn armor appears to be heavy armor but weighs very little without giving up any of its protection. The helm has a horse head design with a small horn sticking out. On the back of the armor is a pair of wings embossed which can be used to fly when a bit of magical energy is pushed into them. The longer the flight is used, the more it taxes on the user's magical energy. There is also a horseshoe design on the inside of each wrist and the back of each ankle.
The Winged Horn is a shortsword which resembles a flattened horn with the guard resembling wings. In this state, they add to his speed a little and his strength a lot. With a small amount of magical energy, the wings can grow and the blade shrinks, followed by splitting in half, becoming a pair of tonfa-like armblades which increase his speed more than his strength.

Magic Level: A

History: Solaris was born and raised not far outside Fiore in a small kingdom known as Questra. He had been born a prince but didn't really care for the easy life of royalty. He preferred to be with the other kids, running and playing and getting dirty. Once he was old enough, he left his home to travel the world, learning more magic. During his travels, he found a young child which he adopted He eventually found Phoenix Wing and began watching some of the members in a playful brawl. It wasn't long after that he decided to join them, further expanding his learning of magic.

Personality: Being a wise leader, he prefers to teach than to battle but can hold his own if needed. He is caring, compassionate and cautious. He often watches over his teammates as a father would his children, though tries his best not to make them feel smothered. He cares about everyone to an extent, even his enemies, often giving those who deserve death a second chance at life to pay for their crimes in other ways.

Guild and guild mark location: Phoenix Wing, left side of neck
Team Members: Sky Nightwing
Three Strengths:
1.
2
3.
Three Weaknesses:
1.
2.
3.
Greatest Love: Plays, operas and musical performances.
Motivation: Family.
Appearance: (A picture works, use the image function)
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This was it. Busy with homework, so still can't critique, but I'm not the only one who can.
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Just curious since it's been awhile, but any update on the opening and ending music?


I have some I just can't post it up
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@Zarkuni thought it was still a wip

But it seems okay
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@Zarkuni thought it was still a wip

But it seems okay


Even WIPs can be critiqued, to help refine the character.
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Even WIPs can be critiqued, to help refine the character.


[WIP]

Name: Solaris "The Jack" Nightwing
Age: 35
Birthday: 1-7

Magic: Solaris can use illusion magic as well as small amounts of fire, ice make and requip.

Illusion: Solaris can make anybody see or hear whatever he wishes. He prefers to use this over his other types of magic as he doesn't care for physical combat as much.

Fire: With this, Solaris can throw small fireballs or cover his fists in flames to add a burning effect to his punches.

Ice Make: Solaris can create shields, barriers, walls and other obstacles to prevent his opponent from reaching what they wish to get to if needed.

Requip: Solaris has 1 set of armor known as the Alicorn and a single sword known as the Winged Horn.
The Alicorn armor appears to be heavy armor but weighs very little without giving up any of its protection. The helm has a horse head design with a small horn sticking out. On the back of the armor is a pair of wings embossed which can be used to fly when a bit of magical energy is pushed into them. The longer the flight is used, the more it taxes on the user's magical energy. There is also a horseshoe design on the inside of each wrist and the back of each ankle.
The Winged Horn is a shortsword which resembles a flattened horn with the guard resembling wings. In this state, they add to his speed a little and his strength a lot. With a small amount of magical energy, the wings can grow and the blade shrinks, followed by splitting in half, becoming a pair of tonfa-like armblades which increase his speed more than his strength.

Magic Level: A

History: Solaris was born and raised not far outside Fiore in a small kingdom known as Questra. He had been born a prince but didn't really care for the easy life of royalty. He preferred to be with the other kids, running and playing and getting dirty. Once he was old enough, he left his home to travel the world, learning more magic. During his travels, he found a young child which he adopted He eventually found Phoenix Wing and began watching some of the members in a playful brawl. It wasn't long after that he decided to join them, further expanding his learning of magic.

Personality: Being a wise leader, he prefers to teach than to battle but can hold his own if needed. He is caring, compassionate and cautious. He often watches over his teammates as a father would his children, though tries his best not to make them feel smothered. He cares about everyone to an extent, even his enemies, often giving those who deserve death a second chance at life to pay for their crimes in other ways.

Guild and guild mark location: Phoenix Wing, left side of neck
Team Members: Sky Nightwing
Three Strengths:
1.
2
3.
Three Weaknesses:
1.
2.
3.
Greatest Love: Plays, operas and musical performances.
Motivation: Family.
Appearance: (A picture works, use the image function)
Additional Details:


Not really sure if you want me to, but I'll put my two cents in.

I don't think that's A-class power. A-class would be going toe to toe with Natsu or Gray or Elfman. I don't really see that kind of power here (^small amounts). Since he is a prince, did he run away or something? You didn't really explain. Also, wisdom comes with experience, he doesn't have much fighting experience in his background. One more thing, As far as I know maker magic is supposed to take years of training and a teacher, that should be added to the background too.
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[WIP]

Name: Solaris "The Jack" Nightwing
Age: 35
Birthday: 1-7

Magic: Solaris can use illusion magic as well as small amounts of fire, ice make and requip.

Illusion: Solaris can make anybody see or hear whatever he wishes. He prefers to use this over his other types of magic as he doesn't care for physical combat as much.

Fire: With this, Solaris can throw small fireballs or cover his fists in flames to add a burning effect to his punches.

Ice Make: Solaris can create shields, barriers, walls and other obstacles to prevent his opponent from reaching what they wish to get to if needed.

Requip: Solaris has 1 set of armor known as the Alicorn and a single sword known as the Winged Horn.
The Alicorn armor appears to be heavy armor but weighs very little without giving up any of its protection. The helm has a horse head design with a small horn sticking out. On the back of the armor is a pair of wings embossed which can be used to fly when a bit of magical energy is pushed into them. The longer the flight is used, the more it taxes on the user's magical energy. There is also a horseshoe design on the inside of each wrist and the back of each ankle.
The Winged Horn is a shortsword which resembles a flattened horn with the guard resembling wings. In this state, they add to his speed a little and his strength a lot. With a small amount of magical energy, the wings can grow and the blade shrinks, followed by splitting in half, becoming a pair of tonfa-like armblades which increase his speed more than his strength.

Magic Level: A

History: Solaris was born and raised not far outside Fiore in a small kingdom known as Questra. He had been born a prince but didn't really care for the easy life of royalty. He preferred to be with the other kids, running and playing and getting dirty. Once he was old enough, he left his home to travel the world, learning more magic. During his travels, he found a young child which he adopted He eventually found Phoenix Wing and began watching some of the members in a playful brawl. It wasn't long after that he decided to join them, further expanding his learning of magic.

Personality: Being a wise leader, he prefers to teach than to battle but can hold his own if needed. He is caring, compassionate and cautious. He often watches over his teammates as a father would his children, though tries his best not to make them feel smothered. He cares about everyone to an extent, even his enemies, often giving those who deserve death a second chance at life to pay for their crimes in other ways.

Guild and guild mark location: Phoenix Wing, left side of neck
Team Members: Sky Nightwing
Three Strengths:
1.
2
3.
Three Weaknesses:
1.
2.
3.
Greatest Love: Plays, operas and musical performances.
Motivation: Family.
Appearance: (A picture works, use the image function)
Additional Details:


sigh

Where to start?

We have a lot of requip magic for starters,

And we have two users of ice magic, one maker and one dragon.

While we don't have many fire type magics, it just seems like you are trying to create a character with too many types of magic, too many elements.

The illusion magic is cool though.

I will accept the requip magic but would prefer that you didn't have ice and fire.

I think you need to flesh out the history a bit.
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Eh, sorry for the short post, wasn't much more I could do.
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Also a million people named Jack.
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Also a million people named Jack.


There are two people named Jack. Mine and Josh's. And the potential third is THE Jack, not just Jack.
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There are two people named Jack. Mine and Josh's. And the potential third is THE Jack, not just Jack.


Sounds like a band. The Three Jacks. xD
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There are two people named Jack. Mine and Josh's. And the potential third is THE Jack, not just Jack.


Funny part is Jack and Jack(ie) are in the same guild, leading to more confusion :D

How long till Damian post?
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Winding down from Graphic Design homework, so give me a bit.

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Sounds like a band. The Three Jacks. xD


You, sir, go to your corner for such a horrible pun XD
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There are two people named Jack. Mine and Josh's. And the potential third is THE Jack, not just Jack.


Jack the Jester from the Major Arcana. :)
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Winding down from Graphic Design homework, so give me a bit.

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You, sir, go to your corner for such a horrible pun XD


xD But bad puns are the best puns.
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Winding down from Graphic Design homework, so give me a bit.

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You, sir, go to your corner for such a horrible pun XD


You're doing graphic design? Cool
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You're doing graphic design? Cool


It's fun. Next step is to find a school that offers animation.
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It's fun. Next step is to find a school that offers animation.


Cool, hope you find one!
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Caits, don't you need to post the next part of the fight?
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Cool, hope you find one!


If I do and get it down, I can provide us with our own series!
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Caits, don't you need to post the next part of the fight?


I do. But I can't access it on my phone at the moment, and don't have the link. Don't worry, it will be up soon

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If I do and get it down, I can provide us with our own series!


Haha, cool!
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