*reads post*

*scratches head*

So, forgive me for asking but... where's the "drop in quality"? To be perfectly honest (and I pray you forgive me my bluntness), I think you're being rather hard on yourself! It was a good answer to Feather's questions and gave further insight as to both Kijani's nature and life within Verrun, without being overbearing or needlessly complicated. More over, it gives me a great point to start a transitional post for a bit of a time jump to morning. 

It may take me a day to get my reply up. I'm working on a dream sequence to give you (the writer) a better view of what's in Victor's head.