Dear [@IrishAngelQueen],

First off, we would really appreciate it if you would post your CS to [b]all[/b] the GMs.

Secondly, your character is unreasonably OP. Dont take this the wrong way but have you even looked at the other CSs and compared them with your new character? Because if you did then you would have seen that the power scaling is way off.

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[b]-Faelar can transform into a Hellhound at will.[/b]

This power, on its own, would have already been fairly powerful. But that is me estimating that she would be a low powered Hellhound. You did not specify in anyway what the powers of this "Hellhound" would be. For all I know it can spit fire which instantly melts stone. Aka, way too strong. The power is not explained enough and thus cant be accepted in its current state.

That would have been my response if it was the only power she had, but it seems like this was actually just a side effect.

[b]-Know someone's deepest fears by placing her hand over their heart.[/b]

Being able to instantly do something which is not teleportation or camouflaging [b]yourself[/b] is an automatic nope, especially if it is a vital thing like knowing someone's inner fears. This is actually more of a godmodding ability, which is not allowed in any way, shape or form. 

[b]-Raise a small band of Shadow Warriors-Skeletal warriors held together by shadows.[/b] 

Again the same as with the Hellhound ability. Not specified enough and too strong to be another side ability. Should be the main focus and probably only ability you posses.

[b]-Cloak herself and others with shadows-it comes in handy when pulling pranks.[/b]

This one I have no issues with, although combined with the other powers this just makes her rediculously OP. Especially if she can summon an army to fight for her.

[b]-Exorcise and send lower-tier demons back to Hell with a single touch.[/b]

Again, no instant abilities. If you had this power then we would be unable to use anything occult or demonic as enemies in our RP because there would be no threat at all.

[b]-Destroy objects with telekinesis.[/b]

Ehehehe... Nope. You say that she can destroy small to medium objects with telekinesis. What do you define as a medium sized object? A laptop? Or a car? Cause if I compare a car to a Boeing 777 the car isnt really that big of an object. Plus, again, instantly destroying things is a nope.

[b]-While in Hell , she can turn lower demons to dust with a snap of her fingers[/b]

Although it's unlikely, this power right here makes us unable to get any kind of action in hell because you'll just instantly clear the entire room.

If I am to also add your "other skills" then we quickly see that she also possesses Super Strength. Last time I checked that was something we would note under "Powers". Being good with weapons... Eh, you can do that imo.


[b]Now, on to the weaknesses...[/b]

Temper is not a weakness but a personality trait.

The sensetive bodyparts are fine though I will ask a question about it later.

"Can send only three lower demons back to Hell all at once." is a trait of your power and not a weakness.

Holy fire and an Angel's blade... Where are we, the normal students, going to get that from if ask? They are viable weaknesses but these seem to be the only two damaging weaknesses. Are these the only things that will hurt her? Because if they are then there is no way that any of the current characters can harm her in any way.


[b]Now, personality.[/b]

The whipping... It's abit weird imo. But hey, that's my opinion. Though I would preffer it if you would not enforce this on others.


[b]Backstory... [/b]

Nothing to say on this to be honest. Little bare bones but that doesnt really matter. It's got the vital parts in it.


[b]And finally your horse.[/b]

Again, should be noted under the "Powers" section and I would like you to add what the "Warhorse"'s traits are.

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