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A few grammatical errors aside it looks alright to me. But I'd point out the international depression was also a thing immediately after the war and would have been a more direct component of the post-war events earlier on than your history seems to imply, with it happening a few years after; as it's also directly related to the massive cut in military expenditures and the industrial demands to keep the first world war rolling. But that may be an issue of presentation of misplacing it in the time-line of events.

I might also comment on the lack of things happening in the interim of the twenties till now, but that may be asking for more than we'd need right now and can certainly be explored later.

And of also proper mention: television wouldn't have been a wide-spread or even notable thing in the 1920's, let alone the late 1920's. At best maybe there'd be newsreel footage dispatched to theaters around the nation for televised mass-media. But the newspapers are just as likely to be able to publish articles on something the day after or in the following days for daily readers; if not then the radio is the biggest contemporary broadcaster. Even if we ignore alternate history implications television only became accessible on a large scale until the fifties or sixties; it should only be experimental now.
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A few grammatical errors aside it looks alright to me. But I'd point out the international depression was also a thing immediately after the war and would have been a more direct component of the post-war events earlier on than your history seems to imply, with it happening a few years after; as it's also directly related to the massive cut in military expenditures and the industrial demands to keep the first world war rolling. But that may be an issue of presentation of misplacing it in the time-line of events.

I might also comment on the lack of things happening in the interim of the twenties till now, but that may be asking for more than we'd need right now and can certainly be explored later.

And of also proper mention: television wouldn't have been a wide-spread or even notable thing in the 1920's, let alone the late 1920's. At best maybe there'd be newsreel footage dispatched to theaters around the nation for televised mass-media. But the newspapers are just as likely to be able to publish articles on something the day after or in the following days for daily readers; if not then the radio is the biggest contemporary broadcaster. Even if we ignore alternate history implications television only became accessible on a large scale until the fifties or sixties; it should only be experimental now.


I thought that I got the television thing fixed, I guess that I didn't save my edits.

I also explained about France during the war and mentioned the international depression. Is this good enough?

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It'll work.
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It'll work.


Thanks! I shall get working on a post.

@Shyri, do you want to do a collaboration post (in the future) after I have posted a couple times on here and after you have posted yourself?
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So I decided to clean up and expand some parts of our page on the Great War. And while I was on it I decided to actually write a page on this thing.
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Lemme see if I can schedule in stuff, I have a really wonky schedule right now but it's likley to be fairly open in the coming weeks.
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Lemme see if I can schedule in stuff, I have a really wonky schedule right now but it's likley to be fairly open in the coming weeks.


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On top of me writing this post, I'm also trying to get a commission'd art piece made up as well for Italy to make up for my continued(How long has it even been since my last post?) lack of being satisfied with my writing ability
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Art is always cool. I wish I could art.
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Art is good.

[Hasn't done PoW art yet for a while]
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You keep drawing sexualized horses. That is the mistake.

Draw sexualized Sotelo's instead.
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Sotelo x Hou is something I require. Might make hugs post
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Nobody would ever post again. We'd be too busy batin'
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I have posted! It has been awhile since I have wrote something. So, let me know if I have any mistakes.
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I noticed a few things that'd make me chuckle but I don't really have time to read it in full right now.

As a note ahead, in the event you didn't read, the RP runs on a time system. Every ten pages is a month and if you want to be OCD about it that means that depending on the time of year every two or three posts (about) is a day.
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A few of things.

1: Having an "Let's launch an invasion in the first post just because" is sort of anathema in Precipice now. We like shit to build up at least a little.

2: Which battle are you referring to? Djibouti is on the Red Sea, and the Battle of the Suez is old news.

3: I don't quite understand what is happening with Mozambique and Tanganyika. Those nations aren't allied with Spain, they chickened out of their treaty obligations because they are afraid of Spain. They have nothing to gain by falling in league with Spain, politically or militarily, they just don't want to be involved in the war at all. An invasion of either of them would still be seen as an act of aggression by Ethiopia, even if it is preoccupied right now.
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I found literally the best Serbia related video ever.
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A few of things.

1: Having an "Let's launch an invasion in the first post just because" is sort of anathema in Precipice now. We like shit to build up at least a little.

2: Which battle are you referring to? Djibouti is on the Red Sea, and the Battle of the Suez is old news.

3: I don't quite understand what is happening with Mozambique and Tanganyika. Those nations aren't allied with Spain, they chickened out of their treaty obligations because they are afraid of Spain. They have nothing to gain by falling in league with Spain, politically or militarily, they just don't want to be involved in the war at all. An invasion of either of them would still be seen as an act of aggression by Ethiopia, even if it is preoccupied right now.

1. That's why I am delaying the invasion. What I mean by several weeks could be several months or years. I am not rushing to invade the country so early. The next posts will give detail about the planning of the invasion and the operation's history.

2. Then, I must of forgot about it or mistaken for another battle. I am referring to the battle, where the Pan-African navy was mostly destroyed. If it's old news, then I just edit it in and remove some words.

3. Mozambique and Tanganyika are allied to Pan-African Empire (according to the lore summary on the first page). Unless I am wrong, then I will look like a dumbass. I also know that Ethiopia will declare war on France, to protect their ally and all of that.
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I have a few questions regarding France

1. They are right wing correct?

2. Are they anti-communist?
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