NoW Round 1- Descartes vs. Yoshua171. [color=fdc68a]1-Characters[/color] The characters are named and clearly described in text giving the reader a vivid picture. Most readers could describe the characters accurately. Score: 4.00 The characters are named and described. Most readers would have some idea of what the characters looked like. Score: 3.00 The characters are named. The reader knows very little about the characters. Score: 2.00 It is hard to tell anything about the characters. Score: 1.00 [color=f7976a]Descartes: 3.20-[/color] [color=a2d39c]Yoshua: 3:60-[/color] I understood the characters, there were glimpses of descriptions of each throughout that gave me a complete picture but both could have done better with this. [color=fdc68a]2-Introduction[/color] First paragraph has a "grabber" or catchy beginning. Score: 4.00 First paragraph has a weak "grabber". Score: 3.00 A catchy beginning was attempted but was confusing rather than catchy. Score: 2.00 No attempt was made to catch the reader's attention in the first paragraph. Score: 1.00 [color=6ecff6]Yosuha171: Your introduction was one paragraph that neither excited me as a reader nor compelled me to be interested in your character. 2.00 Descartes: Your introduction matched your opponent. You could have and should have elevated your writing. I have seen you write some very compelling posts before; I was disappointed in this introduction. 2.00[/color] [color=fdc68a]3-Action[/color] Several action verbs (active voice) are used to describe what is happening in the fight. The fight seems exciting! Score: 4.00 Several action verbs are used to describe what is happening in the fight, but the word choice doesn't make the fightas exciting as it could be. Score: 3.00 A variety of verbs (passive voice) are used and describe the action accurately but not in a very exciting way. Score: 2.00 Little variety seen in the verbs that are used. The fight seems a little boring. Score: 1.00 [color=6ecff6]Yoshua171: Well, although your paragraphs are tight, they convey a good amount of action. You manage to excite me as a reader, although it could have been better. While I do enjoy concise and tight writing, I want to be drawn into the fight more. Action is your way of doing so. 3.75[/color] [color=6ecff6]Descartes: Again, you wrote to your opponent, I know you are capable of excellent writing and would have liked to see more. However, what you did write conveyed a good deal of action to me, helped shape your character and defined him in a very short amount of time that was wonderful. 3.75. [/color] [color=fdc68a]4-Attack/Conflict[/color] It is very easy for the reader to understand the attack the character uses and why it is a problem for the defender. Score: 4.00 It is fairly easy for the reader to understand the attack the character uses and why it is a problem for the defender. Score: 3.00 It is fairly easy for the reader to understand the attack the character uses against the defender, but it is not clear why it is a problem. Score: 2.00 It is not clear what attack the defender faces. Score: 1.00 [color=f7976a]Descartes: You seemed to be on the defensive immediately. Your attacks seemed scattered and haphazard, which may be attributable to character. I thought your efforts were well done, but just randomized and with no actual strategy to them. 2.90[/color] [color=a2d39c]Yoshua171: Well your attacks were precise, easy to understand and had a definite endgame in mind. You did well and utilized your powers to control your enemy nicely. 3.80[/color] [color=fdc68a]5-Defense/Resolution [/color] The defense to the character's attack is easy to understand, and is logical. There are no loose ends. Score: 4.00 The defense to the character's attack is easy to understand, and is somewhat logical. Score: 3.00 The defense to the character's attack is a little hard to understand. Score: 2.00 No defense is attempted or it is impossible to understand. Score: 1.00 [color=a2d39c]Descartes: I began rooting for your character at the end to get to his gear. I had hoped you’d find a way to evade and get there, and actually rooted for you to turn the fight around. You did a good job defensively trying to evade and escape, conveying the desperation your character was feeling. It was palpable. 3.70[/color] [color=f7976a]Yoshua171: Well what can I say, you were never really in any danger. Your defenses allowed you to proceed with your offense very succinctly. Since you were never really in danger from your opponent, I cannot score higher. I hope to see a more challenging fight the next round. 2.50 [/color] [color=fdc68a]6-Creativity[/color] The fight contains many creative details and/or descriptions that contribute to the reader's enjoyment. The author has really used his imagination. Score: 4.00 The fight contains a few creative details and/or descriptions that contribute to the reader's enjoyment. The author has used his imagination. Score: 3.00 The fight contains a few creative details and/or descriptions, but they distract from the fight. The author has tried to use his imagination. Score: 2.00 There is little evidence of creativity in the fight. The author does not seem to have used much imagination Score: 1.00 [color=6ecff6]Well on this part, I can safely say that both parties scored 2.5. Little better than average but I was hoping to see a much more creative and innovative fight.[/color] [color=fdc68a]Final score: [/color] [color=a2d39c]Yoshua171: 18.05/ 24 (Winner by defeating his enemy)[/color] [color=f7976a]Descartes: 18.05/24 [/color]