[@MachineSoul]

Okay, some issues.  

1) Discovering active telekenetic powers through the Force on your own is a no-go.  That'll need removing.

2) The Jedi Order is currently unknown.  It's just an old myth, legend.  Those who exist right now have not made themselves known.  So the way he comes by them doesn't make sense.  

3) On that note, the timeline is bad, too.  You don't specify, but you strongly imply that he was still somewhere in childhood when he was turned over, but he's 24 now.  That's too long of a time.  This is my fault, I never mentioned how long anyone could have trained for.  For that record, we'll say David has been actively seeking apprentices for about five years.  

4) This isn't the Clone Wars or the Old Republic era.  The Jedi aren't military and they don't wear armor.  

5) While you're free to specify your character's fighting style, having separate skills for separate saber styles is not necessary.  Just put a skill for lightsaber combat.  

6) Even with that unnecessary extra skill, I think you're actually one point short on skills.