[quote=@Vordak] Ok, here it is. Don't mind my dry and possibly snarky tone, i never intend for it to be insulting. Keep in mind, teleporting is considered pretty high-level stuff, and for a good reason, so you might want to slap a cooldown, since it seems that you were aiming for a low-powered character here. These two abilities lack any description of their power, and thus, there is no indicator as to what kind of damage you expect them to deal: whether the fireblast can roast a man inside a suit of armor, or just leave a painful, but ultimately survivable burns - this sort of thing. Also, you and your opponent might have a different understanding of what 'mid range' may be, so i suggest you be more concrete here as well. The shadowcloacking part is clear, but the telekinesis is slightly confusing. Does it mean that he can move around shadows, or does it mean that he can turn the shadows into some sort of tangible object than can move around other objects? Or maybe even something else entirely? Again, you need to specify the exact magnitude of these effects: 'utterly supernatural' and 'a substantial amount of force' can be interpreted in a variety of ways. 'running at 700 meters per second', 'lifting a ton overhead' and 'strong enough to bend a horseshoe with their hand' are the most commonly used descriptions for a character's physical capability, but similar measurements can apply to their abilities as well: 'with enough power to punch through 2 inches of solid steel', 'hot enough to boil iron'. Also, can't help but point out that increasing force applied would increase an object's speed, which in turn, would increase its kinetic energy, thus, making these abilities almost entirely the same thing. (F=ma, where 'a' is acceleration; v=at and E=1/2*mv^2, where 'v' is velocity) [/quote] You mention that I seem to be going for a fairly low level character. I see a pointless comment and a question that should be brought up here. The comment is...I am waaaaay too used to my previous RP environment where realistically powered characters are required, and where more than one type of magic added to physical aptitude is heavily frowned upon...I should fix that...and the question is, what defines a low/mid/high level character? I assume low-level is something around the level of normal people, while high ranks as high as ultra-powerful demons, angels, and other beings challenging the limits of destructive godhood, but there are probably some almost-clearly defined transitions? As for the rest, I'm actually trying to go for a somewhat mid-level character, but I may have to up his power levels a bit for that. That said, it seems like the major bit I need to improve here beyond that is details, am I correct?