So the party is cancelled now right?

Does anyone else have plans to enter the contest? If not could we move the judging up to this weekend?

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Not happening.

Does anyone else have plans to enter the contest? If not could we move the judging up to this weekend?

@Lugubrious I know I won the contest but is there any criticism you can offer me or anything you especially liked? I am attempting to improve my writing so feedback both positive and negative is important.

I would also like any criticism or feedback on the submission I had even if you just want to PM it. Anything you liked/didn't like would be very helpful!

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@Lugubrious Reminder.

I did Write's because his was short and he was persistent, but rest assured I'll finish rereading and critique yours as well. The first thing to note, as I alluded to in the contest, is that you almost always use 'there' instead of 'their'.

He's actually quite a bit lighter than record-breaking strongmen, and those guys are smaller than my brother at like 270 (but he's just...well, really fat). Those guys easily top 300, even at or around that height. Eddie Hall, world record holding deadlifter, is 5 inches taller and a hundred and nine pounds heavier. Dude deadlifted 1,020 pounds. Might be juiced, but he's by no means actually obese. Maybe if you just take BMI, but BMI is absolutely worthless as more than a basic guideline. You need body fat % and other measurements to make a real assessment of someone's health level.

One brother is like 5'5" and 180, obese, but he has like a 32-inch waist. ALL muscle. He's built like a statue. Another is about 250-300 and it's NOT muscle...he's got a good ten inches at the waist on Hall.